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Concrit for ziskandra
I want to receive feedback by :
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3)
Here are the works I want feedback on:
Anything eligible that's complete, authored solely by me, and has been posted from 2017 onwards is fair game. Here's the link.
If you're having trouble deciding, here's a selection of works I'd be particularly interested in having critiqued:
Grounded (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Liam Kosta & his parents, 2.2k, M)
Retrospect (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Alec Ryder/Ellen Ryder, 10k words, M.)
Duty (Dragon Age, Loghain Mac Tir character study, 6k, M)
Aulia & Haidrul's Enchanted Weapons and Wares (Original Work, Daughter of a Blacksmith & Son of a Witch, 10k words, M.)
Best Served Hot (Ace Attorney, Franziska von Karma/Miles Edgeworth, 2k words, E.)
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
My main fandoms are Dragon Age, Mass Effect, Ace Attorney, Harry Potter and Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. The ratings on my fics range from G to E, with Major Character Death being the most frequently occurring archive warning. I like exploring messy, complicated relationships, but plot and pacing are probably my weak points.
I have these questions for readers:
(All of these questions are just suggestions; feel free to remark on whatever is most salient to you!)
1. What do you think of the prose? What worked for you, and what places are confusing and/or long-winded?
2. Do the characters' motivations/actions appear internally consistent through the story? Does their dialogue seem realistic?
3. What parts of my writing could afford to be embellished more? Are there leaps of logic that don't make sense to you as a reader? Conversely, is there anywhere I'm getting bogged down in over-explaining things or repeating obvious details?
4. Is there any aspects of the title/summaries/tagging of my works that could be improved?
5. What thoughts do you have on the plot and pacing? This is especially pertinent for more recent works, and/or works that are at least 1000 words. It's one of the weaknesses I've identified in my own writing and something I've been working towards improving in recent months.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Any is fine, so long as not solely negatives are listed. Also, please feel free to mention any SPAG issues you might notice, with the caveat that I probably won't edit them immediately. But I usually do minor edits on published works a few times a year, so I'll be able to fix anything up in my next sweep.
Comments to this post will be:
Unscreened
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3)
Here are the works I want feedback on:
Anything eligible that's complete, authored solely by me, and has been posted from 2017 onwards is fair game. Here's the link.
If you're having trouble deciding, here's a selection of works I'd be particularly interested in having critiqued:
Grounded (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Liam Kosta & his parents, 2.2k, M)
Retrospect (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Alec Ryder/Ellen Ryder, 10k words, M.)
Duty (Dragon Age, Loghain Mac Tir character study, 6k, M)
Aulia & Haidrul's Enchanted Weapons and Wares (Original Work, Daughter of a Blacksmith & Son of a Witch, 10k words, M.)
Best Served Hot (Ace Attorney, Franziska von Karma/Miles Edgeworth, 2k words, E.)
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
My main fandoms are Dragon Age, Mass Effect, Ace Attorney, Harry Potter and Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. The ratings on my fics range from G to E, with Major Character Death being the most frequently occurring archive warning. I like exploring messy, complicated relationships, but plot and pacing are probably my weak points.
I have these questions for readers:
(All of these questions are just suggestions; feel free to remark on whatever is most salient to you!)
1. What do you think of the prose? What worked for you, and what places are confusing and/or long-winded?
2. Do the characters' motivations/actions appear internally consistent through the story? Does their dialogue seem realistic?
3. What parts of my writing could afford to be embellished more? Are there leaps of logic that don't make sense to you as a reader? Conversely, is there anywhere I'm getting bogged down in over-explaining things or repeating obvious details?
4. Is there any aspects of the title/summaries/tagging of my works that could be improved?
5. What thoughts do you have on the plot and pacing? This is especially pertinent for more recent works, and/or works that are at least 1000 words. It's one of the weaknesses I've identified in my own writing and something I've been working towards improving in recent months.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Any is fine, so long as not solely negatives are listed. Also, please feel free to mention any SPAG issues you might notice, with the caveat that I probably won't edit them immediately. But I usually do minor edits on published works a few times a year, so I'll be able to fix anything up in my next sweep.
Comments to this post will be:
Unscreened