Concrit for regshoe

[regshoe]

I want to receive feedback by : Email (esmereldamargaretnotespelling@gmail.com) or comment on this post.

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): My works are here—any of these would be fine! I'd especially like feedback on fic for Flight of the Heron, my current main fandom. If you don't know my main fandoms and don't want to read without knowing canon, you could try one of the stories I've written for various short ballads and fairytales.

My works' fandoms and content notes are: My main fandoms are Flight of the Heron, Raffles and Jonathan Strange & Mr Norrell, and I've also written for various other old book fandoms and ballad/fairytale fandoms—all tagged on AO3. Archive warnings are tagged where relevant—the CNTWs are all for borderline Major Character Death and do not contain any other archive warning content—and more specific warnings are included in the author's notes.

I have these questions for readers: Really, I'd like to know about anything that occurs to you to comment on! I would especially like feedback on characterisation: if you know the fandom, do the characters feel true to their canon selves? if you don't, do you feel you get a good sense of who they are? if it's a ballad/fairytale fic which builds character from a small amount of canon, is this done well? Comments on pacing, structure and plot development would also be good, particularly if it's a longer fic.

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'd like to hear about both good and bad things; I don't mind directness, and would welcome specific thoughts on how I might improve anything that didn't work.

Comments to this post will be: unscreened.

Comments

Re: Feedback: A Propitious Season of Living

[regshoe]

Thank you very much for this! You've given me a lot to think about, and your comments are very helpful. That point about 'preview sentences' gets at something I was aware of in writing and reading but hadn't articulated specifically to myself as a thing, which is an especially useful thing to get from concrit. And I appreciate your other points about Becky's POV and the story's structure. What I had in mind in that last scene was just the external-narrative appropriateness, I suppose, of having the hurt/comfort plot of Becky's illness and the emotional relationship/class stuff resolve at the same time, but I see what you mean about the vagueness of the implications there. Anyway, I shall mull all this over, and keep these things in mind for future writing. :)

(On an unrelated note—I thought I vaguely recognised your username, and following links from your profile, you write The Ace Theist? I got a lot out of reading that blog and your stuff on The Asexual Agenda when I was learning about the ace community a few years ago! Small world.)

Re: Feedback: A Propitious Season of Living

[osteophage]

Glad it was coherent, lol. With my other Concrit-X match, I accidentally based some feedback on a misunderstanding, and we had to talk it over for me to figure out where I went wrong.

And yep, The Ace Theist is me! Small world indeed. Glad I could help there too.

Re: Feedback: A Propitious Season of Living

[regshoe]

Oh dear! I hope the misunderstanding was still useful, though–I always like to hear when people have misunderstood things in my writing, because it tells me where I perhaps needed to explain things more clearly.