Awww, thank you, especially about the nice words about the structure and ship dynamics. I definitely prefer Kylo and Hux to be at least constantly on edge in each other's presence (if not downright enemies or non-con shipping, which I like, too) and for Hux not to forget the past abuse (him being to tuned to Kylo's gestures and moods, and constantly alarmed in his presence, expecting some sort of punishment is the best shippy stuff for me, especially in the context of Hux's father, around whom, I bet, Armitage was exactly the same. mymymy, so many daddy issues all around :D - but that's only one facet I like, I like trying different things for my fav pairings), so I'm incredibly happy that you liked it! <3
I definitely have the problem with tense-switching, I'm fighting a continuous battle with it (I see some progress, even! ;)). in Polish, mixing tenses is how we convey some time-relations between events and while intellectually I know it's something which is a big NO in English grammar, I still do it. Or sometimes I just made a typo and forget the "-ed", I admit. I will give this fic another pass and try to catch as many instances of it as I can, thank you for the notice!
Thank you very, very much, especially (but only, of course) for the praise of my beginning - I tend to think of my openings as weak, but perhaps it's because I think of them all, at some general writer level, and get irritated that I use a few same-y tricks/devices. The comments in this round, all praising my openings, helped me realised it doesn't really matter so much for the reader - if a device works, then it works, even it it's not most original rhetoric figure. It gave a big boost in self-confidence, thank you very, very much!
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I definitely have the problem with tense-switching, I'm fighting a continuous battle with it (I see some progress, even! ;)). in Polish, mixing tenses is how we convey some time-relations between events and while intellectually I know it's something which is a big NO in English grammar, I still do it. Or sometimes I just made a typo and forget the "-ed", I admit. I will give this fic another pass and try to catch as many instances of it as I can, thank you for the notice!
Thank you very, very much, especially (but only, of course) for the praise of my beginning - I tend to think of my openings as weak, but perhaps it's because I think of them all, at some general writer level, and get irritated that I use a few same-y tricks/devices. The comments in this round, all praising my openings, helped me realised it doesn't really matter so much for the reader - if a device works, then it works, even it it's not most original rhetoric figure. It gave a big boost in self-confidence, thank you very, very much!