Concrit for htbthomas

[htbthomas]

I want to receive feedback by: email htbthomas@gmail.com or comments to this post!

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything at https://archiveofourown.org/users/htbthomas/works - especially M and E-rated stories, or any rating of F/F. No safe works.

My works' fandoms and content notes are: I mostly write superhero fandoms or TV comedies, though if a fandom contains secret identity it has a good shot of being on my list. See tags on works for full list of fandoms and content.

I have these questions for readers: I don't think I'm very good at writing M/E scenes, and my F/F seems to fall flat. What would improve it?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 2-3

Comments

[(Anonymous)]

It was the right amount of concrit, and it makes me want to go edit both of these right now. :D

I appreciated your points of how to increase the hot factor - more mental images, less clinical vocabulary, avoiding silliness - next fic I will definitely add these points in. And pronoun trouble! I notice it in others' fics and I can't believe I messed it up here so much. Will make sure to focus on that for a while!

Thanks so much for your concrit. I have a lot to ponder and work on.