Concrit Exchange

Thank you so much! 🥰 I agree that my character motivations could be more clearly indicated, and that some scenes are not well grounded in time. It's something I've heard from beta readers about other stories, so it's definitely a tendency I should try to keep in check. And thank you for pointing out specific passages that didn't work for you, and how you think they could be improved - you've given me a lot of food for thought! Much appreciated!