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August 2022 Madness
The main July 2022 round is over. "Treats" (concrit to someone who is not your assigned recipient, or from someone who isn't even signed up) are welcome! The full schedule is here. The August 2022 follow-up round is live.
Our last round before July 2022 was April 2021, followed by a May 2021 madness post. You're welcome to post concrit on the Madness post, or for anyone with a post tagged open-for-concrit.
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Sticky: July 2022 Swap Info Post
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morbane( Detailed Schedule )
( Expectations if signing up )
July 2022 event sign-up form
Guide to Giving Concrit
April 2021 feedback post
May 2021 madness post
Posts tagged open-for-concrit
Mod email: jukebox.mod@gmail.com
Comments to the sign-up post will be screened. Comments to this post are not screened.
( Expectations if signing up )
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July 2022 event sign-up form
Guide to Giving Concrit
April 2021 feedback post
May 2021 madness post
Posts tagged open-for-concrit
Mod email: jukebox.mod@gmail.com
Comments to the sign-up post will be screened. Comments to this post are not screened.
August 2022 Madness
Aug. 2nd, 2022 09:05 pmmorbaneMadness will happen on this post and in its comments. Thanks for playing!
Getting concrit
Ask for concrit by replying to this post (until the end of August 15 in your time zone). Anyone's welcome, whether or not you just took part in the July 2022 round. If you did sign up, you're welcome to ask for concrit on the same or different pieces, or ask for responses to more specific or different questions or the same ones. Concrit is not guaranteed.
Please include:
You can comment asking for concrit until the end of August 15 in your time zone.
It's okay to be more specific about the kind of concrit you want in Madness than in a normal round. You might not get anything, but feel free to ask.
If you have thoughts on this community's events or the June-July 2022 round, please leave your thoughts on the July 2022 swap info post.
If you are willing to provide feedback on the feedback you got or get - "Yes, this was what I was looking for / I was surprised you focused on this aspect / Actually, that wasn't quite what I was asking / etc" - please consider saying so. This exchange is a learning experience for people who would like to give concrit. Please be constructive in these replies as well.
If you don't want any more concrit, reply to your own comment to say so; if you made your own post, you can also screen or close comments.
Getting concrit
Ask for concrit by replying to this post (until the end of August 15 in your time zone). Anyone's welcome, whether or not you just took part in the July 2022 round. If you did sign up, you're welcome to ask for concrit on the same or different pieces, or ask for responses to more specific or different questions or the same ones. Concrit is not guaranteed.
Please include:
- Which works you want feedback on, and if any of your works are "safe" or should be skipped over
- A link to your work(s)
- How you want to receive feedback - ie, by reply to your own comment, by posting a review where the work is published (AO3, ff.net, LJ...), or by another means. (Note: comments are not screened on this post, so if you post a contact detail, anyone can see it.)
- Any specific questions you want concrit-givers to focus on, and what level of bluntness you prefer, if relevant
- What fandoms and content, roughly, your works contain - especially if asking for feedback on just a few pieces.
You can comment asking for concrit until the end of August 15 in your time zone.
It's okay to be more specific about the kind of concrit you want in Madness than in a normal round. You might not get anything, but feel free to ask.
Please feel free to leave constructive criticism for those who have requested it in comments!
General feedback
If you have thoughts on this community's events or the June-July 2022 round, please leave your thoughts on the July 2022 swap info post.
If you are willing to provide feedback on the feedback you got or get - "Yes, this was what I was looking for / I was surprised you focused on this aspect / Actually, that wasn't quite what I was asking / etc" - please consider saying so. This exchange is a learning experience for people who would like to give concrit. Please be constructive in these replies as well.
If you don't want any more concrit, reply to your own comment to say so; if you made your own post, you can also screen or close comments.
Deadline Passed & Concrit Needed
Jul. 25th, 2022 08:03 pmmorbaneThanks everyone for posting so many pieces of feedback and letting me know where to check them off.
This round is not quite over as we have pinch hitters working on feedback for people who have not yet received two pieces of constructive criticism. Thanks to everyone who expressed interest.
Other treats for participants are very welcome!
Please get in touch if you have not received two pieces of feedback, or if there's another issue such as your concrit-giver choosing a safe work. (morbane,gmail)
This round is not quite over as we have pinch hitters working on feedback for people who have not yet received two pieces of constructive criticism. Thanks to everyone who expressed interest.
Other treats for participants are very welcome!
Please get in touch if you have not received two pieces of feedback, or if there's another issue such as your concrit-giver choosing a safe work. (morbane,gmail)
Deadline reminder
Jul. 21st, 2022 11:27 pmmorbaneHello all! I hope this round's reading and response is going well. Please post your feedback by 11:59pm EDT on July 24, or reach out to me to let me know if there are difficulties.
If you are posting the substance of your feedback somewhere other than on your recipient's DW request post, please either follow that up by commenting on that post (ie: "Hi! I've emailed you feedback on STORY!") (this is easiest for me to keep track of) or by emailing me or sending me a PM to confirm. I will reply to say I got it. Thank you!
If you are posting the substance of your feedback somewhere other than on your recipient's DW request post, please either follow that up by commenting on that post (ie: "Hi! I've emailed you feedback on STORY!") (this is easiest for me to keep track of) or by emailing me or sending me a PM to confirm. I will reply to say I got it. Thank you!
Concrit for horchata
Jul. 2nd, 2022 01:22 pmmorbane[Request for horchata, posted by mod]
I want to receive feedback by:
-Email
-Discord PM
-Via a Google doc I can provide to you!
Here are the works I want feedback on:
I'd love to receive feedback on anything written from 2015 on. My AO3 is here, horchata.
Fandoms and content notes:
All my works after 2015 are written in these fandoms: Haikyuu!, Mob Psycho 100, Free, The Witcher, The Murderbot Diaries. I also have some Yuletide pieces.
Feedback questions:
Do any of these pieces feel precious in ways they didn't earn? Were the emotional beats effective? Do any of them feel overworked/sculpted rather than natural? Are the voices of characters authentic to the piece and the fandom? And, in general, what do you think are their strengths and areas for growth? How can I improve?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
I like knowing what I did well and what I can improve upon. I actually don't receive a lot of critique on my work regularly, so this will be a lovely and new experience for me. I'd love to hear your impressions as you read, what felt emotionally impactful and what didn't; what worked and what fell flat. I would like you to be honest and kind (no need to sugar-coat, but no need to add needles to a salad to see the color I bleed).
Comments to this post will be:
-screened until July 31
I want to receive feedback by:
-Discord PM
-Via a Google doc I can provide to you!
Here are the works I want feedback on:
I'd love to receive feedback on anything written from 2015 on. My AO3 is here, horchata.
Fandoms and content notes:
All my works after 2015 are written in these fandoms: Haikyuu!, Mob Psycho 100, Free, The Witcher, The Murderbot Diaries. I also have some Yuletide pieces.
Feedback questions:
Do any of these pieces feel precious in ways they didn't earn? Were the emotional beats effective? Do any of them feel overworked/sculpted rather than natural? Are the voices of characters authentic to the piece and the fandom? And, in general, what do you think are their strengths and areas for growth? How can I improve?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
I like knowing what I did well and what I can improve upon. I actually don't receive a lot of critique on my work regularly, so this will be a lovely and new experience for me. I'd love to hear your impressions as you read, what felt emotionally impactful and what didn't; what worked and what fell flat. I would like you to be honest and kind (no need to sugar-coat, but no need to add needles to a salad to see the color I bleed).
Comments to this post will be:
-screened until July 31
Concrit for Farla
Jul. 1st, 2022 08:19 pmfarlaI want to receive feedback by : On Ao3, though I don't mind if you want to duplicate it over here as well. (Duplicating it here's probably easier from a mod perspective as well.) I'm fine with anon comments.
Here are the works I want feedback on:
I knew what I was getting into when I said your name, but I said it just the same, Lucifer TV, 4,316 words, on-going.
Such Things as False Truths and Honest Lies, The Witcher, complete.
The Lindworm, The Witcher, 6,425 words, complete.
In the Witch's Tower, The Witcher, 1,201 words, complete.
Yenna, The Witcher, 20,555 words, complete. Ch1-6 is 10k.
The Sun Shines Differently, The Witcher/Dragon Age crossover, 1,113 words, one-shot series.
Encore, Castlevania show, 71,002 words, ongoing. Ch1-4 is 10k.
Disfigured, Pokemon, 1,750 words, complete.
With joy shall I behold the day, that calls my willing soul away, Pokemon, 939 words, complete.
The Point of No Return, Pokemon, 8,060 words, complete.
Another Verse, Pokemon, 80,066 words, ongoing. Ch1 is around 8k.
The Best It Could've Gone, She-Ra, 2,488 words, complete.
Advice for Daughters, Chemical Garden Trilogy, 4,573 words, complete.
Or a lot of other things found here.
For the multi-chapter ones, I'm fine with a comment on a chapter rather than the whole.
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Mild gore, character death, abuse, science and biology heavy.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm most interested hearing whatever stood out to you.
I often go in an odd direction from canon but I do really like canon as a base. If you're familiar with a fandom, I'd like to know what you thought of how I characterized people or if there's something I missed in worldbuilding. And I value things hanging together in general, so even if you're fandom blind I'd like to hear how much the world/people/plot makes sense to you.
A number of my stories involve mildly unreliable narrators - ones who aren't lying, but whose viewpoints strongly color what they think is happening. I'm curious how well that works and your impression of the characters/situation.
I find rephrasing a sentence or giving examples of another way to handle a plot element very helpful for understanding what people mean when they point out a problem they've seeing.
For Another Verse in particular, the main character is meant to be walking a line where she wants other people hurt but she's limited in her actions to what's socially acceptable. I think I've been too conservative about what she could get away with and want to rework that. Advice on how she could be worse would be great.
I wrote Advice for Daughters a while ago and was thinking of going back over it again. As it's expected to be read pretty fandom-blind, I'm particularly curious what it sounds like is going on.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Blunt is fine. If you liked something, I'm happy to hear it, but if you have nothing nice to say, I'm happy to hear that too.
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened.
Here are the works I want feedback on:
I knew what I was getting into when I said your name, but I said it just the same, Lucifer TV, 4,316 words, on-going.
Such Things as False Truths and Honest Lies, The Witcher, complete.
The Lindworm, The Witcher, 6,425 words, complete.
In the Witch's Tower, The Witcher, 1,201 words, complete.
Yenna, The Witcher, 20,555 words, complete. Ch1-6 is 10k.
The Sun Shines Differently, The Witcher/Dragon Age crossover, 1,113 words, one-shot series.
Encore, Castlevania show, 71,002 words, ongoing. Ch1-4 is 10k.
Disfigured, Pokemon, 1,750 words, complete.
With joy shall I behold the day, that calls my willing soul away, Pokemon, 939 words, complete.
The Point of No Return, Pokemon, 8,060 words, complete.
Another Verse, Pokemon, 80,066 words, ongoing. Ch1 is around 8k.
The Best It Could've Gone, She-Ra, 2,488 words, complete.
Advice for Daughters, Chemical Garden Trilogy, 4,573 words, complete.
Or a lot of other things found here.
For the multi-chapter ones, I'm fine with a comment on a chapter rather than the whole.
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Mild gore, character death, abuse, science and biology heavy.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm most interested hearing whatever stood out to you.
I often go in an odd direction from canon but I do really like canon as a base. If you're familiar with a fandom, I'd like to know what you thought of how I characterized people or if there's something I missed in worldbuilding. And I value things hanging together in general, so even if you're fandom blind I'd like to hear how much the world/people/plot makes sense to you.
A number of my stories involve mildly unreliable narrators - ones who aren't lying, but whose viewpoints strongly color what they think is happening. I'm curious how well that works and your impression of the characters/situation.
I find rephrasing a sentence or giving examples of another way to handle a plot element very helpful for understanding what people mean when they point out a problem they've seeing.
For Another Verse in particular, the main character is meant to be walking a line where she wants other people hurt but she's limited in her actions to what's socially acceptable. I think I've been too conservative about what she could get away with and want to rework that. Advice on how she could be worse would be great.
I wrote Advice for Daughters a while ago and was thinking of going back over it again. As it's expected to be read pretty fandom-blind, I'm particularly curious what it sounds like is going on.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Blunt is fine. If you liked something, I'm happy to hear it, but if you have nothing nice to say, I'm happy to hear that too.
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened.
Concrit for regshoe
Jul. 1st, 2022 04:01 pmregshoeI want to receive feedback by : Email (esmereldamargaretnotespelling@gmail.com) or comment on this post.
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): My works are here—any of these would be fine! I'd especially like feedback on fic for Flight of the Heron, my current main fandom. If you don't know my main fandoms and don't want to read without knowing canon, you could try one of the stories I've written for various short ballads and fairytales.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: My main fandoms are Flight of the Heron, Raffles and Jonathan Strange & Mr Norrell, and I've also written for various other old book fandoms and ballad/fairytale fandoms—all tagged on AO3. Archive warnings are tagged where relevant—the CNTWs are all for borderline Major Character Death and do not contain any other archive warning content—and more specific warnings are included in the author's notes.
I have these questions for readers: Really, I'd like to know about anything that occurs to you to comment on! I would especially like feedback on characterisation: if you know the fandom, do the characters feel true to their canon selves? if you don't, do you feel you get a good sense of who they are? if it's a ballad/fairytale fic which builds character from a small amount of canon, is this done well? Comments on pacing, structure and plot development would also be good, particularly if it's a longer fic.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'd like to hear about both good and bad things; I don't mind directness, and would welcome specific thoughts on how I might improve anything that didn't work.
Comments to this post will be: unscreened.
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): My works are here—any of these would be fine! I'd especially like feedback on fic for Flight of the Heron, my current main fandom. If you don't know my main fandoms and don't want to read without knowing canon, you could try one of the stories I've written for various short ballads and fairytales.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: My main fandoms are Flight of the Heron, Raffles and Jonathan Strange & Mr Norrell, and I've also written for various other old book fandoms and ballad/fairytale fandoms—all tagged on AO3. Archive warnings are tagged where relevant—the CNTWs are all for borderline Major Character Death and do not contain any other archive warning content—and more specific warnings are included in the author's notes.
I have these questions for readers: Really, I'd like to know about anything that occurs to you to comment on! I would especially like feedback on characterisation: if you know the fandom, do the characters feel true to their canon selves? if you don't, do you feel you get a good sense of who they are? if it's a ballad/fairytale fic which builds character from a small amount of canon, is this done well? Comments on pacing, structure and plot development would also be good, particularly if it's a longer fic.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'd like to hear about both good and bad things; I don't mind directness, and would welcome specific thoughts on how I might improve anything that didn't work.
Comments to this post will be: unscreened.
Concrit for Luzula
Jul. 1st, 2022 05:09 pmluzulaHere are the works I want feedback on: Choose a fic from my AO3 account. I would prefer something from approximately the last seven years (if you critique something from my first years of writing it probably won't be very useful to me now). Most of my works are in due South, but I'm no longer actively in that fandom and I would prefer you to choose something else. The most useful to me would be if you chose something from my current fandom (Flight of the Heron) or related 18th century fics, but I understand that it's a tiny fandom, so you don't have to!
My works' fandoms and content notes are: See AO3 link above.
I have these questions for readers: Oh, hmm. I would like feedback on all aspects of the fic: style and language, plot, characterization, setting, structure. I don't have more specific questions--I just want to hear about things you thought of that I haven't myself! And you don't have to include every aspect; it's okay to focus on the aspects of writing which you feel are your own strengths to give feedback on.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: You can be blunt if you want, but please do include positive as well as negative feedback.
Comments to this post will be: unscreened
My works' fandoms and content notes are: See AO3 link above.
I have these questions for readers: Oh, hmm. I would like feedback on all aspects of the fic: style and language, plot, characterization, setting, structure. I don't have more specific questions--I just want to hear about things you thought of that I haven't myself! And you don't have to include every aspect; it's okay to focus on the aspects of writing which you feel are your own strengths to give feedback on.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: You can be blunt if you want, but please do include positive as well as negative feedback.
Comments to this post will be: unscreened
Concrit for paulamcg
Jul. 1st, 2022 08:43 pmpaulamcgI want to receive feedback by : comments on AO3 and/or comments on my DW post in this community
Here are the works I want feedback on: Any fic posted on my AO3. Some of the fics were written and first published before my eight-year hiatus, in 2005-2010, and when posting them on AO3 in 2020, I didn't backdate them, only mentioned the year of writing in the notes. In a way I'd prefer feedback on post-hiatus work (because I used to have a chance to discuss my fics in forum and LJ comments back in the day), but it would also be lovely if the commenter compared the styles in an old fic and a recent one. I'd particularly love feedback on The Angel of Charity, or This Awfully Long Month, which is (awfully long for a non-chaptered story :D) almost 20K words, or Any Gift of True Caring, which is almost 14K words. But I've got around 130 clearly shorter fics (grouped into 13 series) to choose from. They all belong to the same canon-divergent universe, but each is meant to work also separately.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: All my fanfic is in the Harry Potter fandom. I'm not sure I've been good at tagging, but I guess my stories are generally gentle or subtle even when the theme is grief or hardship, and I don't write long, detailed scenes of sex or violence. In a couple of fics there are brief moments of dubcon, and in a few there are references to childhood sexual abuse, and those are tagged.
I have these questions for readers: How does the opening work? Does it establish clearly enough where and when we are, and in whose perspective? And can it actually work for readers that I take them to share directly what the character experiences, thinks and feels at each moment? Is there something about the style that makes the writing not approachable? (If you are familiar with the HP fandom, even though you don't write in it) do you think there's something outdated about the scenarios in my stories? Is there also something that's refreshing or otherwise interesting? Is the conclusion rewarding or perhaps too ambiguous? (Particularly if there is no beta mentioned in my notes) what kind of language errors (which specific ones, if you don't mind commenting in such detail) do you find? Feel free to ignore these questions, as I'll be happy about any thoughtful review!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: (Because a lot of these fics have got very little attention and love from readers) I'd like to hear also what works for you, in addition to what (kind of errors) I could fix in these texts and what I could improve in my style when writing new stories.
Comments to this post will be: unscreened
Here are the works I want feedback on: Any fic posted on my AO3. Some of the fics were written and first published before my eight-year hiatus, in 2005-2010, and when posting them on AO3 in 2020, I didn't backdate them, only mentioned the year of writing in the notes. In a way I'd prefer feedback on post-hiatus work (because I used to have a chance to discuss my fics in forum and LJ comments back in the day), but it would also be lovely if the commenter compared the styles in an old fic and a recent one. I'd particularly love feedback on The Angel of Charity, or This Awfully Long Month, which is (awfully long for a non-chaptered story :D) almost 20K words, or Any Gift of True Caring, which is almost 14K words. But I've got around 130 clearly shorter fics (grouped into 13 series) to choose from. They all belong to the same canon-divergent universe, but each is meant to work also separately.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: All my fanfic is in the Harry Potter fandom. I'm not sure I've been good at tagging, but I guess my stories are generally gentle or subtle even when the theme is grief or hardship, and I don't write long, detailed scenes of sex or violence. In a couple of fics there are brief moments of dubcon, and in a few there are references to childhood sexual abuse, and those are tagged.
I have these questions for readers: How does the opening work? Does it establish clearly enough where and when we are, and in whose perspective? And can it actually work for readers that I take them to share directly what the character experiences, thinks and feels at each moment? Is there something about the style that makes the writing not approachable? (If you are familiar with the HP fandom, even though you don't write in it) do you think there's something outdated about the scenarios in my stories? Is there also something that's refreshing or otherwise interesting? Is the conclusion rewarding or perhaps too ambiguous? (Particularly if there is no beta mentioned in my notes) what kind of language errors (which specific ones, if you don't mind commenting in such detail) do you find? Feel free to ignore these questions, as I'll be happy about any thoughtful review!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: (Because a lot of these fics have got very little attention and love from readers) I'd like to hear also what works for you, in addition to what (kind of errors) I could fix in these texts and what I could improve in my style when writing new stories.
Comments to this post will be: unscreened
Concrit for ziskandra
Jul. 2nd, 2022 04:49 amziskandraI want to receive feedback by :
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3)
Here are the works I want feedback on:
Anything eligible that's complete, authored solely by me, and has been posted from 2017 onwards is fair game. Here's the link.
If you're having trouble deciding, here's a selection of works I'd be particularly interested in having critiqued:
Grounded (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Liam Kosta & his parents, 2.2k, M)
Retrospect (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Alec Ryder/Ellen Ryder, 10k words, M.)
Duty (Dragon Age, Loghain Mac Tir character study, 6k, M)
Aulia & Haidrul's Enchanted Weapons and Wares (Original Work, Daughter of a Blacksmith & Son of a Witch, 10k words, M.)
Best Served Hot (Ace Attorney, Franziska von Karma/Miles Edgeworth, 2k words, E.)
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
My main fandoms are Dragon Age, Mass Effect, Ace Attorney, Harry Potter and Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. The ratings on my fics range from G to E, with Major Character Death being the most frequently occurring archive warning. I like exploring messy, complicated relationships, but plot and pacing are probably my weak points.
I have these questions for readers:
(All of these questions are just suggestions; feel free to remark on whatever is most salient to you!)
1. What do you think of the prose? What worked for you, and what places are confusing and/or long-winded?
2. Do the characters' motivations/actions appear internally consistent through the story? Does their dialogue seem realistic?
3. What parts of my writing could afford to be embellished more? Are there leaps of logic that don't make sense to you as a reader? Conversely, is there anywhere I'm getting bogged down in over-explaining things or repeating obvious details?
4. Is there any aspects of the title/summaries/tagging of my works that could be improved?
5. What thoughts do you have on the plot and pacing? This is especially pertinent for more recent works, and/or works that are at least 1000 words. It's one of the weaknesses I've identified in my own writing and something I've been working towards improving in recent months.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Any is fine, so long as not solely negatives are listed. Also, please feel free to mention any SPAG issues you might notice, with the caveat that I probably won't edit them immediately. But I usually do minor edits on published works a few times a year, so I'll be able to fix anything up in my next sweep.
Comments to this post will be:
Unscreened
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3)
Here are the works I want feedback on:
Anything eligible that's complete, authored solely by me, and has been posted from 2017 onwards is fair game. Here's the link.
If you're having trouble deciding, here's a selection of works I'd be particularly interested in having critiqued:
Grounded (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Liam Kosta & his parents, 2.2k, M)
Retrospect (Mass Effect: Andromeda, Alec Ryder/Ellen Ryder, 10k words, M.)
Duty (Dragon Age, Loghain Mac Tir character study, 6k, M)
Aulia & Haidrul's Enchanted Weapons and Wares (Original Work, Daughter of a Blacksmith & Son of a Witch, 10k words, M.)
Best Served Hot (Ace Attorney, Franziska von Karma/Miles Edgeworth, 2k words, E.)
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
My main fandoms are Dragon Age, Mass Effect, Ace Attorney, Harry Potter and Crazy Ex-Girlfriend. The ratings on my fics range from G to E, with Major Character Death being the most frequently occurring archive warning. I like exploring messy, complicated relationships, but plot and pacing are probably my weak points.
I have these questions for readers:
(All of these questions are just suggestions; feel free to remark on whatever is most salient to you!)
1. What do you think of the prose? What worked for you, and what places are confusing and/or long-winded?
2. Do the characters' motivations/actions appear internally consistent through the story? Does their dialogue seem realistic?
3. What parts of my writing could afford to be embellished more? Are there leaps of logic that don't make sense to you as a reader? Conversely, is there anywhere I'm getting bogged down in over-explaining things or repeating obvious details?
4. Is there any aspects of the title/summaries/tagging of my works that could be improved?
5. What thoughts do you have on the plot and pacing? This is especially pertinent for more recent works, and/or works that are at least 1000 words. It's one of the weaknesses I've identified in my own writing and something I've been working towards improving in recent months.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Any is fine, so long as not solely negatives are listed. Also, please feel free to mention any SPAG issues you might notice, with the caveat that I probably won't edit them immediately. But I usually do minor edits on published works a few times a year, so I'll be able to fix anything up in my next sweep.
Comments to this post will be:
Unscreened
Concrit for adriennefae
Jun. 30th, 2022 04:23 pmadriennefaeI want to receive feedback by : Email or comment on my post in this community
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Any of the works on this filtered list.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly Star Trek Discovery and The Expanse, though there are a couple of other things in the mix too. They range from 1k to 5.5k in terms of word count. Everything on the filtered list is F/F. Most of it is rated T, but there are a couple of M-rated stories too. They're all either No Warnings Apply or CNTW, with the latter usually meaning the story deals with either temporary or canonical character death. A lot of the fics deal with subject matter like trauma, grief, etc.
I have these questions for readers:
-If you know the fandom, do the characters seem IC? Whether you know the characters or not, do you feel like they are internally consistent within the story and that you get a good sense of who they are?
-Is the main relationship believable to you? Do the characters' attraction to/feelings about each other come across well? Do the characters' emotions come across well in general?
-Do you feel there is a good balance of description to dialogue to inner monologue/introspection to narration?
-Does the dialogue flow well? Does the story flow well in general?
-Do any parts not make sense?
-Does the beginning draw you in? Does the ending work for you?
-Is there anything else you particularly liked or disliked?
-Feedback on tags/titles/summaries also welcome.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'd like to hear both things you liked and things you didn't. Feel free to be direct.
Comments to this post will be: unscreened
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Any of the works on this filtered list.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly Star Trek Discovery and The Expanse, though there are a couple of other things in the mix too. They range from 1k to 5.5k in terms of word count. Everything on the filtered list is F/F. Most of it is rated T, but there are a couple of M-rated stories too. They're all either No Warnings Apply or CNTW, with the latter usually meaning the story deals with either temporary or canonical character death. A lot of the fics deal with subject matter like trauma, grief, etc.
I have these questions for readers:
-If you know the fandom, do the characters seem IC? Whether you know the characters or not, do you feel like they are internally consistent within the story and that you get a good sense of who they are?
-Is the main relationship believable to you? Do the characters' attraction to/feelings about each other come across well? Do the characters' emotions come across well in general?
-Do you feel there is a good balance of description to dialogue to inner monologue/introspection to narration?
-Does the dialogue flow well? Does the story flow well in general?
-Do any parts not make sense?
-Does the beginning draw you in? Does the ending work for you?
-Is there anything else you particularly liked or disliked?
-Feedback on tags/titles/summaries also welcome.
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'd like to hear both things you liked and things you didn't. Feel free to be direct.
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Concrit for Ancslove
Jun. 29th, 2022 06:04 pmancsloveI want to receive feedback by: A comment on this post, or on the individual works on AO3
Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything on my AO3 is fair game! archiveofourown.org/users/ancslove
My works' fandoms and content notes are: I've mostly written in Buffy the Vampire Slayer/Angel, Les Miserables, Star Wars Original Trilogy and post-ROTJ Legends, Original Works, Ancient Greek Religion and Lore. My fic can range from fluffy romance and smut, to gen angst, noncon, and dark themes. All noncon and other dark themes are clearly tagged.
I have these questions for readers: General impression? Overall flow and pacing? Emotional engagement and effectiveness of prose? Does the ending feel earned, or too abrupt? Is the smut sexy and/or emotional to you?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'd love to hear what worked for you, as well as where you think I can improve!
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened
Concrit for Mireia
Jun. 29th, 2022 04:25 pmmireiaI want to receive feedback by : Commenting on the fic on AO3, or posting a comment here (screened).
Here are the works I want feedback on: Any of these.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Small fandoms, mostly! I have works for Long Live the Queen, Stardew Valley, Final Fantasy II, Breath of Fire 1, and Golden Sun. All warnings should be listed in the tags.
I have these questions for readers:
- If you know the fandom, did you think the characters were in-character and/or the themes went well with the canon?
- Did the story flow well?
- Did the characters, their motivations, and any growth seem believable to you?
- Does anything seem vague or unexplained to the point of being confusing?
- Did anything seem out of place, handled poorly, or take you out of the story?
- For stories written since the previous round (And set the palace on fire around him, Fear of Flying, and Going Forward), did you find the sentence structure varied enough? That was very helpful feedback I got last time, so I've attempting to pay better attention to it since.
- For Fear of Flying - Did you feel the story was fair to Haley, and that Linus and Leo's association of her with city life made sense? Leo's impression of her was supposed to mimic the player's: finding her unlikable and shallow at first, but discovering there's more there with time and interactions. (Haley is supposed to be partway through her in-game character development in this story, if that helps.)
- For Within My Grasp - Where is your eye immediately drawn? Do you think the picture is balanced? What would you say the piece's mood is? Are there any technical flaws that throw you out of it?
- For And set the palace on fire around him - I've had this fic idea for ages, but actually writing it was like pulling teeth. I'm still not satisfied with it. Does it make any sense at all? I've also got about 300 or so words I cut because I thought they were unnecessary, but now I'm having second thoughts. I'd be happy to show you what was cut if you request it.
- Overall, did you enjoy the work you chose?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Any and all impressions for writing or art. Feedback about SPAG or style is welcome, too.
Comments to this post will be: Screened.
Thank you for your time!
Concrit for Nonplussed
Jun. 28th, 2022 09:00 pmnonplussedI want to receive feedback by : Your choice of email, Discord PM, comment on my DW post in this community, or in a shared google doc for the fic of your choice (which I can provide once you let me know which fic you're choosing)
Here are the works I want feedback on: Any fic from my ao3 here posted after Nov 2021
My works' fandoms and content notes are: My fandoms are MDZS/the Untamed, Word of Honor RPF, and Our Flag Means Death. Ratings range from G to E.
I have these questions for readers:
- I'd always like feedback on flow and pacing, dialogue, emotional engagement (how well it gave you feels, and how it have done better in this respect), and how well the humour lands. Does anything feel draggy or boring?
- How well does the fic open? In the first 1-2 paragraphs, does it manage to catch the reader's interest, and how could it do so better?
- If you are comfortable in your knowledge of the characters, which parts did you find in character, and which less so? Does the narrative voice fit the character?
- For E rated fic, is the smut sexy, and are there ways it could be sexier/more satisfying/more integrated with the characters/relationships/etc? Are the emotional arcs/themes consistent throughout? Is the tension built up well all the way to a satisfying climax, or did some parts of it fall flat/take away from the sexiness of it?
- Which jokes are landing well, and which aren't? Which sentences/phrases are working well, and are there any that feel boring/clunky/unclear/trite?
- What's your general impression of the fic?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Please focus on where I can improve - don't worry about sugarcoating your criticism
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened
Here are the works I want feedback on: Any fic from my ao3 here posted after Nov 2021
My works' fandoms and content notes are: My fandoms are MDZS/the Untamed, Word of Honor RPF, and Our Flag Means Death. Ratings range from G to E.
I have these questions for readers:
- I'd always like feedback on flow and pacing, dialogue, emotional engagement (how well it gave you feels, and how it have done better in this respect), and how well the humour lands. Does anything feel draggy or boring?
- How well does the fic open? In the first 1-2 paragraphs, does it manage to catch the reader's interest, and how could it do so better?
- If you are comfortable in your knowledge of the characters, which parts did you find in character, and which less so? Does the narrative voice fit the character?
- For E rated fic, is the smut sexy, and are there ways it could be sexier/more satisfying/more integrated with the characters/relationships/etc? Are the emotional arcs/themes consistent throughout? Is the tension built up well all the way to a satisfying climax, or did some parts of it fall flat/take away from the sexiness of it?
- Which jokes are landing well, and which aren't? Which sentences/phrases are working well, and are there any that feel boring/clunky/unclear/trite?
- What's your general impression of the fic?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Please focus on where I can improve - don't worry about sugarcoating your criticism
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened
Concrit for egelantier
Jun. 28th, 2022 11:11 pmeglantiereI want to receive feedback by : preferably comments on AO3, or on DW on my request post.
Here are the works I want feedback on: everything on![[archiveofourown.org profile]](https://p.dreamwidth.org/b164c54b26e4/-/archiveofourown.org/favicon.ico)
egelantier is fair game.
If you'd like more direction, in this round I'd particularly interested in feedback on:
and our work is never done, Psmith pslavefic, 7500 words
winterheart, origific fantasy m/m arranged marriage with a bonus dragon, 9000 words
nowhere but footfall to the path, TSOMD, Wang Zhi/Tang Fan pre-relationship with drama and whump and torture, 6500 words
the latest slew of drabbles
My works' fandoms and content notes are: a lot of different fandoms! My primary fandom is FFXV, but I write around a lot in exchanges and such. I don't write explicit porn, but I do write some pretty hard and occasionally graphic h/c, and there's an occasional fic with MCD (it's always warned for, so check the tags).
I have these questions for readers:
- are there any stylistic tics that are noticeable (not in a good way) to you, like overusing a word or a specific sentence structure?
- are there bits where, to you, i am for pathos or high drama, but end up in bathos and something unintentionally funny or melodramatic instead?
- is there enough 'showing', for your personal taste?
- if you have anything to say about how the structure of the fics comes off to you - the emotional/narrative/plot-wise rhytm and beat of it - i'd be very grateful.
- for the fics that use pastiche, mainly Psmith and Goblin Emperor: DID IT WORK THOUGH?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'm fine with pretty much everything that's constructively phrased; I'd be especially grateful if the feedbacker offered some suggestions on how they would handle something that seemed off to me.
Comments to this post will be: Visible.
Here are the works I want feedback on: everything on
If you'd like more direction, in this round I'd particularly interested in feedback on:
and our work is never done, Psmith pslavefic, 7500 words
winterheart, origific fantasy m/m arranged marriage with a bonus dragon, 9000 words
nowhere but footfall to the path, TSOMD, Wang Zhi/Tang Fan pre-relationship with drama and whump and torture, 6500 words
the latest slew of drabbles
My works' fandoms and content notes are: a lot of different fandoms! My primary fandom is FFXV, but I write around a lot in exchanges and such. I don't write explicit porn, but I do write some pretty hard and occasionally graphic h/c, and there's an occasional fic with MCD (it's always warned for, so check the tags).
I have these questions for readers:
- are there any stylistic tics that are noticeable (not in a good way) to you, like overusing a word or a specific sentence structure?
- are there bits where, to you, i am for pathos or high drama, but end up in bathos and something unintentionally funny or melodramatic instead?
- is there enough 'showing', for your personal taste?
- if you have anything to say about how the structure of the fics comes off to you - the emotional/narrative/plot-wise rhytm and beat of it - i'd be very grateful.
- for the fics that use pastiche, mainly Psmith and Goblin Emperor: DID IT WORK THOUGH?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'm fine with pretty much everything that's constructively phrased; I'd be especially grateful if the feedbacker offered some suggestions on how they would handle something that seemed off to me.
Comments to this post will be: Visible.
Concrit for unspeakablehorror
Jun. 28th, 2022 12:31 amunspeakablehorrorI want to receive feedback by :
- AO3 comment
- comment on my DW post in this community
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
All 5 works on my AO3 are fine (same username of unspeakablehorror), Rescue and Little Lost Maul are both under 10,000 words, but if someone wants to write concrit for my longer works (Cut Strings, Heart of Shadow, Ascent), that's great too, just keep in mind those are all currently unfinished. I'm fine with someone focusing on concrit for just a few chapters (or whatever amount they want) of the longer works if they prefer.
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Star Wars and Legend of Zelda. Only Star Wars has any complete stories under 10,000 words, though I'm fine with people focusing on any extract of their choice for one of my longer works.
Please see AO3 info and tags. Besides that, there are no main character deaths in any of the stories, but secondary characters do occassionally die and flashbacks may contain scenes depicting character deaths. Characters that were dead since the story began may also be discussed.
I have these questions for readers:
(Please feel free to answer as few or as many of the following as you wish. I just want to give ideas on areas of interest to me. I think different readers may feel better able to comment on some questions than others.)
What was your favorite character or characters? What did you enjoy or find interesting about them?
What thoughts do you have on characterization in the story?
Did the character's motivations make sense?
Were there elements to the story you found offputting? If so, what do you think would make those less so for you?
Thoughts on dialogue?
Thoughts on descriptions?
Was the worldbuilding well incorporated?
How would you describe the plot? Did you notice any plotholes?
Thoughts on story pacing?
What themes did you notice in the work, if any?
Anything else you want to say about the work?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
I prefer directness in feedback, and want to know both what did and didn't work for the reader, but don't want exclusively negative feedback. The reader should be able to mention something positive about the work, so I prefer feedback from readers who who don't entirely hate the story. But I'm otherwise fine with whatever balance of positives and negatives the reader wishes to discuss. I appreciate praise, but I also find other people's assessments of issues and flaws in my works quite useful, and have made a number of changes to my writing due to such feedback.
While I don't require sugarcoating, I would ask the reader to refrain from being overly harsh or insulting towards myself as an author. Please feel free to point out any negative qualities of the work--but please be tactful and keep in mind that the purpose is to evaluate the quality of the work, not the author.
I also prefer concrit to not assume there's one single correct way to write. Different pieces, even ones from the same author, can have very different goals and target audiences. Therefore, when giving negative criticism, please try to give background on what expectation(s) of yours were not fulfilled, what specific goals the narrative choice may clash with, or what particular audiences you think would take issue with it.
Comments to this post will be:
unscreened
- AO3 comment
- comment on my DW post in this community
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
All 5 works on my AO3 are fine (same username of unspeakablehorror), Rescue and Little Lost Maul are both under 10,000 words, but if someone wants to write concrit for my longer works (Cut Strings, Heart of Shadow, Ascent), that's great too, just keep in mind those are all currently unfinished. I'm fine with someone focusing on concrit for just a few chapters (or whatever amount they want) of the longer works if they prefer.
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Star Wars and Legend of Zelda. Only Star Wars has any complete stories under 10,000 words, though I'm fine with people focusing on any extract of their choice for one of my longer works.
Please see AO3 info and tags. Besides that, there are no main character deaths in any of the stories, but secondary characters do occassionally die and flashbacks may contain scenes depicting character deaths. Characters that were dead since the story began may also be discussed.
I have these questions for readers:
(Please feel free to answer as few or as many of the following as you wish. I just want to give ideas on areas of interest to me. I think different readers may feel better able to comment on some questions than others.)
What was your favorite character or characters? What did you enjoy or find interesting about them?
What thoughts do you have on characterization in the story?
Did the character's motivations make sense?
Were there elements to the story you found offputting? If so, what do you think would make those less so for you?
Thoughts on dialogue?
Thoughts on descriptions?
Was the worldbuilding well incorporated?
How would you describe the plot? Did you notice any plotholes?
Thoughts on story pacing?
What themes did you notice in the work, if any?
Anything else you want to say about the work?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
I prefer directness in feedback, and want to know both what did and didn't work for the reader, but don't want exclusively negative feedback. The reader should be able to mention something positive about the work, so I prefer feedback from readers who who don't entirely hate the story. But I'm otherwise fine with whatever balance of positives and negatives the reader wishes to discuss. I appreciate praise, but I also find other people's assessments of issues and flaws in my works quite useful, and have made a number of changes to my writing due to such feedback.
While I don't require sugarcoating, I would ask the reader to refrain from being overly harsh or insulting towards myself as an author. Please feel free to point out any negative qualities of the work--but please be tactful and keep in mind that the purpose is to evaluate the quality of the work, not the author.
I also prefer concrit to not assume there's one single correct way to write. Different pieces, even ones from the same author, can have very different goals and target audiences. Therefore, when giving negative criticism, please try to give background on what expectation(s) of yours were not fulfilled, what specific goals the narrative choice may clash with, or what particular audiences you think would take issue with it.
Comments to this post will be:
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Concrit for sadisticsparkle
Jun. 28th, 2022 01:08 amsadisticsparkleI want to receive feedback by : whatever method you prefer, including comments here and on the works themselves
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Any +1K fic posted from May 2021 on. FE:3H fic can be found here: https://archiveofourown.org/users/Shipwreck_Mary/works
My works' fandoms and content notes are: F/F, F/M, M/M, gen. All ratings. Fandoms are mostly Steve/Tony in several universes with some Fire Emblem 3H het and Star Trek Discovery fic. Then Dragon Age, Violet Evergarden, Spiritfarer, Saint Seiya, Love Nikki and Taylor Swift songs.
A lot of my Explicit fic is dubcon or CNTW.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm not expecting answers to all of these! Just some pointers.
General questions:
- Are there any moments where the story makes a jump you don't quite follow? I've always had an issue with assuming the reader is in my head and not explaining things enough.
- How do the endings work? Are they too sudden? Does the tension deflate?
- How is the paratext working: titles, summaries, tags? Is it accurate?
- Are the narrative voices in different fics distinctive?
- How are the metaphors and similes working? Too elaborate? Too trite? if they're working, how or why?
For explicit fics:
- How is the writing of the physical sensations? The sensuality, I guess
- How is the description of the orgasms working? Is it climax-y enough?
For fic with weird structure like Stored Dreams, Flowing Through the Dreams of Time, and Hometown Skeptics (the TS one):
- Is it ever TOO confusing?
- How does the mixed media elements work in Hometown Skeptics?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I don't mind getting blunt feedback, but I do prefer it if there's also some praise alongside it.
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened.
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Any +1K fic posted from May 2021 on. FE:3H fic can be found here: https://archiveofourown.org/users/Shipwreck_Mary/works
My works' fandoms and content notes are: F/F, F/M, M/M, gen. All ratings. Fandoms are mostly Steve/Tony in several universes with some Fire Emblem 3H het and Star Trek Discovery fic. Then Dragon Age, Violet Evergarden, Spiritfarer, Saint Seiya, Love Nikki and Taylor Swift songs.
A lot of my Explicit fic is dubcon or CNTW.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm not expecting answers to all of these! Just some pointers.
General questions:
- Are there any moments where the story makes a jump you don't quite follow? I've always had an issue with assuming the reader is in my head and not explaining things enough.
- How do the endings work? Are they too sudden? Does the tension deflate?
- How is the paratext working: titles, summaries, tags? Is it accurate?
- Are the narrative voices in different fics distinctive?
- How are the metaphors and similes working? Too elaborate? Too trite? if they're working, how or why?
For explicit fics:
- How is the writing of the physical sensations? The sensuality, I guess
- How is the description of the orgasms working? Is it climax-y enough?
For fic with weird structure like Stored Dreams, Flowing Through the Dreams of Time, and Hometown Skeptics (the TS one):
- Is it ever TOO confusing?
- How does the mixed media elements work in Hometown Skeptics?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I don't mind getting blunt feedback, but I do prefer it if there's also some praise alongside it.
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened.
Concrit for Soryenn
Jun. 27th, 2022 10:39 pmsoryennI want to receive feedback by : Email, Discord PM, Comment on my DW post in this community
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): Anything on this list!
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Fandoms are Gundam Wing (5), YuGiOh!DM (3), X/1999 (1), Simoun (1), Rogue One (3), A Song of Ice and Fire (1), Monkey Island (1) and Original Work (1).
All works rated G or T. Pairings are M/M, F/F, M/M/M and M/M/F.
I have these questions for readers:
- How is the characterization? Do the characters feel likable? Can you relate to their emotions, and in general, are the emotions well conveyed or not?
- Are my in medias res beginnings working? How can I make the endings better?
- Can you follow what’s going on in action scenes? Is my general lack of descriptions an issue?
- Are there parts that left you confused? I usually leave a lot unsaid to leave room for interpretation, but do I leave too much unsaid?
- How can I make better summaries? I also have issues choosing tags, so any help with that would be appreciated.
- And/or anything else you want to point out and that I'm not thinking of!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
- Direct and geared towards improvement would be best: tell me what works and how I can do better for what doesn’t.
- A note on SPAG: I’m ESL. Please tell me if there are misused punctuation, awkward sentences, words I’ve mistaken for others, etc. (especially for repeating mistakes), I'd really appreciate it. If you want to do only SPAG concrit, I’ll be super fine with that as well. (Except for All Three of Our Hearts and Cherry Blossoms and Camellias which have been SPAG-checked by a native speaker already)
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): Anything on this list!
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Fandoms are Gundam Wing (5), YuGiOh!DM (3), X/1999 (1), Simoun (1), Rogue One (3), A Song of Ice and Fire (1), Monkey Island (1) and Original Work (1).
All works rated G or T. Pairings are M/M, F/F, M/M/M and M/M/F.
I have these questions for readers:
- How is the characterization? Do the characters feel likable? Can you relate to their emotions, and in general, are the emotions well conveyed or not?
- Are my in medias res beginnings working? How can I make the endings better?
- Can you follow what’s going on in action scenes? Is my general lack of descriptions an issue?
- Are there parts that left you confused? I usually leave a lot unsaid to leave room for interpretation, but do I leave too much unsaid?
- How can I make better summaries? I also have issues choosing tags, so any help with that would be appreciated.
- And/or anything else you want to point out and that I'm not thinking of!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
- Direct and geared towards improvement would be best: tell me what works and how I can do better for what doesn’t.
- A note on SPAG: I’m ESL. Please tell me if there are misused punctuation, awkward sentences, words I’ve mistaken for others, etc. (especially for repeating mistakes), I'd really appreciate it. If you want to do only SPAG concrit, I’ll be super fine with that as well. (Except for All Three of Our Hearts and Cherry Blossoms and Camellias which have been SPAG-checked by a native speaker already)
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened
Concrit for yelp
Jun. 26th, 2022 11:40 pmyelpI want to receive feedback by :
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3) (slightly preferred)
Here are the works I want feedback on:
Feedback on anything at this link would be amazing!
I'm currently trying to improve at writing multichapter works, so I'd especially appreciate feedback about one of the ones I've written so far, even if you're only able to read a few chapters:
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
All works should be appropriately tagged, but I'd be happy to provide more detailed content warnings for any.
I have these questions for readers:
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I absolutely adore feedback, so any form or style will be cherished. Feel free to be blunt with your concrit, I would be delighted to learn where to improve. I'm also happy to hear if there are parts you enjoyed, or surprised you, or made you feel any kind of emotion - all things difficult to gauge as the author!
Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3) (slightly preferred)
Here are the works I want feedback on:
Feedback on anything at this link would be amazing!
I'm currently trying to improve at writing multichapter works, so I'd especially appreciate feedback about one of the ones I've written so far, even if you're only able to read a few chapters:
- Solid as Stone, Genshin Impact, E, incomplete, M/F (32k)
- You Are Pain Pinned to Muscle, Dr. Stone, T, incomplete, M/M (6.5k)
- Cloak and Dagger, Cape and Cowl, Original, E (ish), F/F (12.6k)
- The Substitute King, Original Work, E, M/M, major character death, non-con (10.8k)
- The Devil's Cut, Eyeshield 21, T, M/M (9k)
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
- Mostly: Eyeshield 21, Genshin Impact, Original Work
- Also: Alice in Borderland, Hunter x Hunter, The Man from U.N.C.L.E., Dr. Stone, Arcane: League of Legends
All works should be appropriately tagged, but I'd be happy to provide more detailed content warnings for any.
I have these questions for readers:
- What are your first impressions of the work before reading? Do you have any feedback about title, tags, or summary?
- What impressions are you left with after reading? Were there any memorable moments? Was there a satisfying ending?
- Are there moments where the story runs out of steam for you, and struggles to keep your interest? Is there anything you would change about the structure or pacing of the story?
- Did you find anything implausible or jarring that took you out of the reading experience?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I absolutely adore feedback, so any form or style will be cherished. Feel free to be blunt with your concrit, I would be delighted to learn where to improve. I'm also happy to hear if there are parts you enjoyed, or surprised you, or made you feel any kind of emotion - all things difficult to gauge as the author!
Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31
Concrit for Athaia
Jun. 26th, 2022 11:09 amathaiaI want to receive feedback by : comment on my DW post in this community
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): anything that's on my AO3 profile. That includes extracts of the longer works - for example, do the first chapters work as hooks, would you read on (if this was your fandom)? Of course, you can pick something from the middle, too.
I'm not interested in feedback on The Heart of All Things, as it's in a very different style from what I usually write.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly I write Gen, and most of my works are rated T. There are some M-rated fics, but I strive to tag everything that could raise concern, and I do pretty thorough summaries.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm aware that most people don't know my main fandom, so please approach it as if it was an original work, and let me know if the plot makes sense to you, if the characters feel relatable and believable, if their motivations are clear to you, if the pacing is appropriate, etc. Basically, let me know if anything makes you go "huh?", "meh," or "yeah, right! (as if!)"
But if you want to go more granular, by all means - the most interesting feedback is on the things I'm not even aware of. And for the sake of my ego, if you enjoyed something, let me know, too!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Please be as matter-of-factly as possible. While gushing praise is nice, I'm not sad if that's not your style, but I don't think that any of us is qualified to give 'brutal advice' and will react a bit miffed if I perceive your crit descending from a soap box.
Also, please note that my attitude towards adverbs and semicolons doesn't follow American orthodoxy ;-) and while I will note your opinion about either, I probably won't change a thing about their use (or frequency).
Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): anything that's on my AO3 profile. That includes extracts of the longer works - for example, do the first chapters work as hooks, would you read on (if this was your fandom)? Of course, you can pick something from the middle, too.
I'm not interested in feedback on The Heart of All Things, as it's in a very different style from what I usually write.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly I write Gen, and most of my works are rated T. There are some M-rated fics, but I strive to tag everything that could raise concern, and I do pretty thorough summaries.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm aware that most people don't know my main fandom, so please approach it as if it was an original work, and let me know if the plot makes sense to you, if the characters feel relatable and believable, if their motivations are clear to you, if the pacing is appropriate, etc. Basically, let me know if anything makes you go "huh?", "meh," or "yeah, right! (as if!)"
But if you want to go more granular, by all means - the most interesting feedback is on the things I'm not even aware of. And for the sake of my ego, if you enjoyed something, let me know, too!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Please be as matter-of-factly as possible. While gushing praise is nice, I'm not sad if that's not your style, but I don't think that any of us is qualified to give 'brutal advice' and will react a bit miffed if I perceive your crit descending from a soap box.
Also, please note that my attitude towards adverbs and semicolons doesn't follow American orthodoxy ;-) and while I will note your opinion about either, I probably won't change a thing about their use (or frequency).
Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31
