Date: 2021-05-19 06:35 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] eglantiere
I read Over Grass and Over Stone and The Bottom Half of the Hourglass, and since I've been alerted by your question, I did pay attention to the descriptions, and for both stories there practically were no descriptions at all. Both stories were dialogue and action, practically without set pieces - it's especially noticeable in the Big Hero 6 fic, where there are several 'look' verbs - Hiro looks at the hospital and it 'looks the same,' Honey Lemon does her chemical stuff but it's descripted in broadest possible terms.

But at the same time: if you didn't mention your descriptions to your request, I think I wouldn't have paid attention to the lack of them? You have pastiche/voice down for the Ranger fic, and a lovely emotional tone to it; the BH6 fic moves along briskly, and evokes the mood of canon very well while keeping the canon divergence nice and interesting. I don't know if your style would work for something like original works, where the reader needs to have something sensory to ping off; but for fic it more or less works out. I read Tolkien and I've seen BH6; I know how things look and how characters look, and I don't need additional information that much.

(I do prefer more descriptive prose when I'm reading for myself! But I indeed thought this was a stylistic choice of 'just the ways things go sometimes.')

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