Concrit for azurrys

[azurrys]

I want to receive feedback by: Comments on this post, where the work is published, or by email are all fine!
Email - infwhsyms@outlook.com

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): Any fics posted on my main AO3 pseud from 2018 or later, excluding Smoke and Metal, Freeze Shock and More Than Clothes; here is a filtered view.

I would be especially interested in feedback on any of the following works:

A Good Brother (Genshin Impact, E, 2.6k)

Noblesse Oblige (Genshin Impact, E, 8.5k)

Safe Harbour (Kamen Rider Amazons, G, 3.1k)

Paradise Lost (Granblue Fantasy, E, 5k)

Vessel of Bonds (Granblue Fantasy, T, 10.6k)

If you're down for something longer, I would absolutely love feedback on my ongoing WIP! It's one of my few non-exchange fics and is my first attempt at sustaining a long plot — I would be really interested in hearing any thoughts on it. Please don't feel obligated to read the whole thing; up to wherever you want to stop is totally fine (and I'm also very interested in hearing when/why you decided to stop, if you drop it midway).

Memory of Dust (Genshin Impact, T, 18k - averages 2-4k per chapter, currently 5 chapters posted)

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Primarily Granblue Fantasy and Genshin Impact, which have 10+ works each; other fandoms include Original Work, Prince of Tennis, Idol Producer/Nine Percent, Fire Emblem Awakening and Kamen Rider Amazons, and have 1-2 works each. Content notes and archive warnings are tagged individually per fic. The explicit fics include works which feature consent issues or tagged incest pairings.

I have these questions for readers:

if you're familiar with the fandom, I'd be very interested in hearing any impressions on characterisation/voices/portrayal. I tend to vary characterisation and dynamics across different works, but are the characters internally consistent within the fic?

I would also love any feedback on titles, summaries and tags — do they seem relevant or interesting? Is there anything I've failed to tag for that should be tagged?

What do you find most memorable about the work, if anything? If nothing in particular sticks out, I'd like to hear that as well!

For fics with multiple scenes/more complex setups, is there anything confusing about the setup or plot, or something in the setting that seems to be underexplained? Do the scene breaks and transitions flow well, or are there any which feel abrupt/confusing?

I tend to write relatively similar kinks across the board. Does this come off as repetitive or same-y? Do the kink(s) overwhelm the characterisation? I write a lot of M/M porn and I worry sometimes about falling into the ATG/any two guys pit.

For explicit fics in general, is the porn engaging? Are there any points that fall flat or feel unsexy? Detail-wise, are there any notable inconsistent or confusing moments for things like limb placement, clothes, positioning, etc., or the opposite problem of over-concern with where things are?

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'm interested in any impressions you have, including negative ones, as long as the feedback isn't purely negative. I would love to hear what worked for you alongside what didn't. If there are any aspects you think I could improve on, I'd be delighted to hear what they are!

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