Concrit for Hokuto
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concrit_xI want to receive feedback by:
-Email
-Discord PM
-Dreamwidth DM or comment
-AO3 comment
-Any other option that works for you
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Any of my published works within the length requirements are fair game! I would be especially interested in feedback on the following two stories:
the wire tensing (Weiss Kreuz, gen, 6k, Schwarz [especially Nagi]-centric, other content notes on AO3)
An Educational Detour on the Road of Life (Naruto, light Gai/Kakashi, 5.5k, missionfic, other content notes on AO3)
If anyone is interested in working with longer fic, I would also particularly appreciate feedback on the following two stories:
to distract our hearts (Naruto, Kisame/Itachi, 25k, content notes on AO3)
An unpublished Saiyuki canon-divergent fic focused on Kami-sama, about 38.5k (will provide GDocs link or text file in your preferred format if anyone expresses interest)
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
All of my published fics have appropriate tags and content notes on AO3, and I am open to providing further details if requested! The unpublished Saiyuki fic contains canon-typical violence and comedic violence/bickering, as well as an incident of sexual harassment; unreliable narration; one incident of unwanted sexual advances between two main characters (no sex happens) and a generally unhealthy attitude around sex from Kami-sama; and referenced/implied traumatic/abusive childhoods (because, well, Saiyuki).
I have these questions for readers:
-Do characters feel/sound like themselves? Are there any lines/moments that feel particularly IC/OOC? For minor original characters, do they sound distinct/interesting/memorable without detracting from the main/canon characters?
-Does the pacing work? Are there any sections that feel too slow or too rushed?
-Have I overlooked any important canon details or forgotten a plot point? Does anything seem implausible/unrealistic?
-Are there any particular issues with the prose that strike you? (Bland, too much/too little detail, repetition, etc.)
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Focused on what I can build on or improve for future stories and not strictly on what could be changed in posted works (although I welcome specific advice there as well). I don't mind directness, but I would prefer to hear what I'm doing well/getting right as well as what I can improve on and specific ways to improve or exercises to keep in mind - I would rather get something like "The pacing in this section feels a little slow, could you remove some details or cut it/summarize instead?" than "The pacing here doesn't work." I'm not too worried about SPAG but am always happy to have typos, missing words, clumsy phrasing, etc. pointed out (can't catch 'em all myself!).
Comments to this post will be: Screened until July 31st
-Discord PM
-Dreamwidth DM or comment
-AO3 comment
-Any other option that works for you
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Any of my published works within the length requirements are fair game! I would be especially interested in feedback on the following two stories:
the wire tensing (Weiss Kreuz, gen, 6k, Schwarz [especially Nagi]-centric, other content notes on AO3)
An Educational Detour on the Road of Life (Naruto, light Gai/Kakashi, 5.5k, missionfic, other content notes on AO3)
If anyone is interested in working with longer fic, I would also particularly appreciate feedback on the following two stories:
to distract our hearts (Naruto, Kisame/Itachi, 25k, content notes on AO3)
An unpublished Saiyuki canon-divergent fic focused on Kami-sama, about 38.5k (will provide GDocs link or text file in your preferred format if anyone expresses interest)
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
All of my published fics have appropriate tags and content notes on AO3, and I am open to providing further details if requested! The unpublished Saiyuki fic contains canon-typical violence and comedic violence/bickering, as well as an incident of sexual harassment; unreliable narration; one incident of unwanted sexual advances between two main characters (no sex happens) and a generally unhealthy attitude around sex from Kami-sama; and referenced/implied traumatic/abusive childhoods (because, well, Saiyuki).
I have these questions for readers:
-Do characters feel/sound like themselves? Are there any lines/moments that feel particularly IC/OOC? For minor original characters, do they sound distinct/interesting/memorable without detracting from the main/canon characters?
-Does the pacing work? Are there any sections that feel too slow or too rushed?
-Have I overlooked any important canon details or forgotten a plot point? Does anything seem implausible/unrealistic?
-Are there any particular issues with the prose that strike you? (Bland, too much/too little detail, repetition, etc.)
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Focused on what I can build on or improve for future stories and not strictly on what could be changed in posted works (although I welcome specific advice there as well). I don't mind directness, but I would prefer to hear what I'm doing well/getting right as well as what I can improve on and specific ways to improve or exercises to keep in mind - I would rather get something like "The pacing in this section feels a little slow, could you remove some details or cut it/summarize instead?" than "The pacing here doesn't work." I'm not too worried about SPAG but am always happy to have typos, missing words, clumsy phrasing, etc. pointed out (can't catch 'em all myself!).
Comments to this post will be: Screened until July 31st
