Concrit Exchange

Thank you very much for this! You've given me a lot to think about, and your comments are very helpful. That point about 'preview sentences' gets at something I was aware of in writing and reading but hadn't articulated specifically to myself as a thing, which is an especially useful thing to get from concrit. And I appreciate your other points about Becky's POV and the story's structure. What I had in mind in that last scene was just the external-narrative appropriateness, I suppose, of having the hurt/comfort plot of Becky's illness and the emotional relationship/class stuff resolve at the same time, but I see what you mean about the vagueness of the implications there. Anyway, I shall mull all this over, and keep these things in mind for future writing. :)

(On an unrelated note—I thought I vaguely recognised your username, and following links from your profile, you write The Ace Theist? I got a lot out of reading that blog and your stuff on The Asexual Agenda when I was learning about the ace community a few years ago! Small world.)