concrit_x | Concrit for A Friendly Irin (Reply)

I want to receive feedback by:
Comment where the work is published. If you want to comment anon that is fine, but please do it on Archive of Our Own where I can respond to you.

If you don't have time to read the entirety of the longer works, only reviewing a few chapters is fine.

Here are the works I want feedback on:
Flawed Crystals (Steven Universe), fangame, playtime ~8 hours
The Darkness Between Stars (Steven Universe), 80k words, complete
Unwanted (The Amazing World of Gumball), 10k words, oneshot
The Boulevard of Broken Hearts (The Amazing World of Gumball), 20k words, complete
The Cure For Nothing (The Reconstruction), 3k words, oneshot
The Gospel of Cynthia (Pokemon), 3k words, complete
any Pokemon oneshot (vary between 400 and 10k words)

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Steven Universe
The Amazing World of Gumball
Pokemon games
The Reconstruction

content notes: Mental illness, references to abuse, family drama, relationship drama and discussion of infidelity (The Boulevard of Broken Hearts), some graphic violence (but mostly isolated to a few scenes). I believe I am pretty thorough with tagging, but please tell me if there are any tags you'd like me to add.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: Direct

I have these questions for readers:

For all fics: Were the characters in-character? Did you like their characterizations?

Most of my Pokemon fic are explicitly commentaries on the way canon and fandom treat pokemon and how much agency can be ascribed to them. With the exception of Blood is Thicker Than Water, they are the focus of the piece and the perspectives you should consider. Please comment on what you thought of them and their behavior.

For The Gospel of Cynthia, I would appreciate a response to my author's note on the topic of religion in Pokemon. Did the fic give you any ideas or make you reevaluate your prior assumptions?

The Darkness Between Stars is an explicit response to and criticism of canon, with many scenes being direct parallels or retellings of canon ones. What do you think of this criticism? Do you feel it is accurate or inaccurate? What do you think of the changes I made to make my AU work?

For Flawed Crystals, did I handle the characters' issues accurately and respectfully?

For Flawed Crystals, how did you treat Jasper and why? Was the climax of her arc satisfying or unsatisfying?

For Flawed Crystals, what did you think of the ending and metacommentary?

For Flawed Crystals, how was the game balance? Did you feel any of the characters were disproportionately useful or underutilized? Do you have anything to add to the developer retrospective?