Thank you so much for the critique! I think you have good points about me not having given equal attention to Carol's side of the relationship compared to Phoenix's, and not having fully gotten Carol's feelings across. I'll keep that in mind in the future.
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Date: 2020-09-07 08:11 pm (UTC)