Concrit for misspinkman/SegaBarrett

[misspinkman]

I want to receive feedback by : DW comment or A03 comment is fine

Here are the works I want feedback on: Honestly, anything! See what you like. They are here https://archiveofourown.org/users/SegaBarrett

My works' fandoms and content notes are: the top ones are Breaking Bad, Bates Motel, House MD, Queen, and Oz. Mostly everything is in the T range with a few explicit works. There are a few fics with warnings for Noncon and I think a few with Underage (for canonical backstory in Bates Motel, but nothing is super explicit. Spare a Little Candle is the one that gets the most into that pairing but it's largely fade-to-black).

I have these questions for readers: What should I include more of? Less of? What works? Where might I lose people?

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Load me up on praise first so the criticism hurts less :P

Comments to this post will be: cooked and eaten. :P Unscreened?

Comments

[yelp]

I have left concrit on In Her Hands, Help Wanted, and A Place to Call My Own. I'm impressed that you're able to write so many different types of stories - it was easy to find ones super relevant to my interests, and these were quite a delightful read. I hope my feedback might be helpful to you! 

[derwent_f]

I left comments on Our Thing, A Night to Remember, and All You Wanted.

Like yelp, I'm also impressed by the range of your stories! I chose the ones whose canons I'm familiar with. Aside from those 3 fics, I also read Half of One, Then and Now, and Whatever Happened to Norma Louise?. From those six fics, I suggest that you add more description of setting (place). It doesn't have to be full on paragraphs, but one or two lines will suffice to add more atmosphere to the stories and add to the characterisation. Like, in Half of One, it wasn't clear where Persephone and Demeter are having their arguments.

I hope you find the feedback helpful!