concrit_x | Concrit for Farla

I want to receive feedback by : On Ao3, though I don't mind if you want to duplicate it over here as well. (Duplicating it here's probably easier from a mod perspective as well.) I'm fine with anon comments.

Here are the works I want feedback on:
The Lindworm, The Witcher, 6,425 words, complete.
In the Witch's Tower, The Witcher, 1,201 words, complete.
Yenna, The Witcher, 20,555 words, complete.
The Sun Shines Differently, The Witcher/Dragon Age crossover, 1,113 words, one-shot series.
Encore, Castlevania show, 71,002 words, ongoing.
With joy shall I behold the day, that calls my willing soul away, Pokemon, 939 words, complete.
Sundown and the Shedding-Skin Woman, Pokemon, 3,056 words, complete.
The Point of No Return, Pokemon, 8,060 words, complete.
Another Verse, Pokemon, 80,066 words, ongoing.
The Best It Could've Gone, She-Ra, 2,488 words, complete.

Absolutely not opposed to comments on anything else including meta and even the most ancient stuff at the back.

For the multi-chapter ones, I'm fine with a comment on a chapter rather than the whole.

My works' fandoms and content notes are:

Mild gore, character death, abuse, science and biology heavy.

I have these questions for readers:

I'm most interested hearing whatever stood out to you.

I often go in an odd direction from canon but I do really like canon as a base. If you're familiar with a fandom, I'd like to know what you thought of how I characterized people or if there's something I missed in worldbuilding. And I value things hanging together in general, so even if you're fandom blind I'd like to hear how much the world/people/plot makes sense to you.

A number of my stories involve mildly unreliable narrators - ones who aren't lying, but whose viewpoints strongly color what they think is happening. I'm curious how well that works and your impression of the characters/situation.

I find rephrasing a sentence or giving examples of another way to handle a plot element very helpful for understanding what people mean when they point out a problem they've seeing.

For Another Verse in particular, the main character is meant to be walking a line where she wants other people hurt but she's limited in her actions to what's socially acceptable. I think I've been too conservative about what she could get away with and advice on how she could be worse would be great.

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:

Blunt is fine. If you liked something, I'm happy to hear it, but if you have nothing nice to say, I'm happy to hear that too.

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