Concrit for pendrecarc
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concrit_xI want to receive feedback by: DW comment
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Complete works posted on AO3 after mid-2014. Filtered link here. For AO3 works, I'd prefer to get concrit here. Safe stories to exclude: Six Seeds; Red Sky at Morning; The Fine Print
If you've got loads of time and want to read a novel-length WIP, I'm working on a Regency f/f romance featuring identity porn, crossdressing, and marriage of convenience here:linneacarls. Feedback can go straight in the comments there.
My works' fandoms and content notes are:
The Queen's Thief; Jane Austen; Magnus Archives; Original Works; Rivers of London; a variety of smaller fandoms. Stories on AO3 are generally tagged or have notes for anything canon-atypical. The original WIP contains references to two instances of sexual violence, both of which occur before the story, neither of which was committed against the POV character.
I have these questions for readers:
I love writing pastiche and changing up my style based on the fandom and type of story. Would appreciate notes on how the chosen voice, POV, and style does or doesn't work. For example, in Rivers of London, I've written three stories with three different POVs, and I tried to make them all very specific to the chosen character. I'd love to hear ways in which that served, or failed to serve, any individual story.
I'd also love comments on pacing, characterization, and clarity of plot. For exchange stories, I'm often trying to convey a sense of larger events/context in a limited number of words and would like to know if that is or isn't successful. For the novel-length WIP, a sense of when it gets bogged down or repetitive, or when something needs more time. I love wordsmithing, so detailed feedback on phrasing, sentence and paragraph structure, rhythm, etc. is welcome. (It's possibly less useful for the novel-length WIP, which is completely unedited, but I'm open to it.)
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Anything from gentle to extremely critical feedback is fine!
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Complete works posted on AO3 after mid-2014. Filtered link here. For AO3 works, I'd prefer to get concrit here. Safe stories to exclude: Six Seeds; Red Sky at Morning; The Fine Print
If you've got loads of time and want to read a novel-length WIP, I'm working on a Regency f/f romance featuring identity porn, crossdressing, and marriage of convenience here:
linneacarls. Feedback can go straight in the comments there.My works' fandoms and content notes are:
The Queen's Thief; Jane Austen; Magnus Archives; Original Works; Rivers of London; a variety of smaller fandoms. Stories on AO3 are generally tagged or have notes for anything canon-atypical. The original WIP contains references to two instances of sexual violence, both of which occur before the story, neither of which was committed against the POV character.
I have these questions for readers:
I love writing pastiche and changing up my style based on the fandom and type of story. Would appreciate notes on how the chosen voice, POV, and style does or doesn't work. For example, in Rivers of London, I've written three stories with three different POVs, and I tried to make them all very specific to the chosen character. I'd love to hear ways in which that served, or failed to serve, any individual story.
I'd also love comments on pacing, characterization, and clarity of plot. For exchange stories, I'm often trying to convey a sense of larger events/context in a limited number of words and would like to know if that is or isn't successful. For the novel-length WIP, a sense of when it gets bogged down or repetitive, or when something needs more time. I love wordsmithing, so detailed feedback on phrasing, sentence and paragraph structure, rhythm, etc. is welcome. (It's possibly less useful for the novel-length WIP, which is completely unedited, but I'm open to it.)
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Anything from gentle to extremely critical feedback is fine!
Comments to this post will be: Unscreened
Re: Routine Maintenance
Date: 2021-05-14 03:45 am (UTC)Thank you for this lovely, detailed response on so many levels! It means a lot to me.
Sex scenes are not my usual wheelhouse TBH they aren't mine, either, but when I figured out I could use one as actual plot resolution, I couldn't resist.
I'm having trouble, now, remembering what I knew about Mellenby's timeline before writing this, and what precisely is or isn't canon. Can I ask--and if you don't have time to answer or think of specifics, that's more than understandable--what you found confusing about it? If it's something I can clear up easily for future readers, I'd love to do that.
Again, thank you, reading this was a joy.
Re: Routine Maintenance
Date: 2021-05-27 08:18 pm (UTC)Now let's nerd out.
I could not tell that sex scenes are not your usual wheelhouse, you wrote it with confidence and panache.
As for David's timeline, I've searched my notes and can't work out now what's canon and what's my plucked from mid air dates, but I am partway through a reread and will let you know if I find anything. For some reason I have the 1950s in my head as when he died but I may be wrong on that one. I did have a bit of a struggle trying to work out where you'd put the construction of the wards, basically because the arithmetic was a bit beyond what my brain can handle without a pen and paper. Trying to work out when the story is set, then how long Nightingale has been maintaining the wards, and therefore how long they've been there... and honestly, I came up with a different year every time I tried it and eventually gave up and just enjoyed the story.