Concrit for Athaia
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concrit_xI want to receive feedback by : comment on my DW post in this community
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): anything that's on my AO3 profile. That includes extracts of the longer works - for example, do the first chapters work as hooks, would you read on (if this was your fandom)? Of course, you can pick something from the middle, too.
I'm not interested in feedback on The Heart of All Things, as it's in a very different style from what I usually write.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly I write Gen, and most of my works are rated T. There are some M-rated fics, but I strive to tag everything that could raise concern, and I do pretty thorough summaries.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm aware that most people don't know my main fandom, so please approach it as if it was an original work, and let me know if the plot makes sense to you, if the characters feel relatable and believable, if their motivations are clear to you, if the pacing is appropriate, etc. Basically, let me know if anything makes you go "huh?", "meh," or "yeah, right! (as if!)"
But if you want to go more granular, by all means - the most interesting feedback is on the things I'm not even aware of. And for the sake of my ego, if you enjoyed something, let me know, too!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Please be as matter-of-factly as possible. While gushing praise is nice, I'm not sad if that's not your style, but I don't think that any of us is qualified to give 'brutal advice' and will react a bit miffed if I perceive your crit descending from a soap box.
Also, please note that my attitude towards adverbs and semicolons doesn't follow American orthodoxy ;-) and while I will note your opinion about either, I probably won't change a thing about their use (or frequency).
Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31
Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): anything that's on my AO3 profile. That includes extracts of the longer works - for example, do the first chapters work as hooks, would you read on (if this was your fandom)? Of course, you can pick something from the middle, too.
I'm not interested in feedback on The Heart of All Things, as it's in a very different style from what I usually write.
My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly I write Gen, and most of my works are rated T. There are some M-rated fics, but I strive to tag everything that could raise concern, and I do pretty thorough summaries.
I have these questions for readers:
I'm aware that most people don't know my main fandom, so please approach it as if it was an original work, and let me know if the plot makes sense to you, if the characters feel relatable and believable, if their motivations are clear to you, if the pacing is appropriate, etc. Basically, let me know if anything makes you go "huh?", "meh," or "yeah, right! (as if!)"
But if you want to go more granular, by all means - the most interesting feedback is on the things I'm not even aware of. And for the sake of my ego, if you enjoyed something, let me know, too!
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Please be as matter-of-factly as possible. While gushing praise is nice, I'm not sad if that's not your style, but I don't think that any of us is qualified to give 'brutal advice' and will react a bit miffed if I perceive your crit descending from a soap box.
Also, please note that my attitude towards adverbs and semicolons doesn't follow American orthodoxy ;-) and while I will note your opinion about either, I probably won't change a thing about their use (or frequency).
Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31
Marooned On The Planet Of The Apes Ch3
Date: 2022-07-09 01:15 pm (UTC)If it's supposed to be unambiguous supervilliany, then I'd say it'd work far better to be more, "This will only work for a fraction of the people the other way would've, but the couple people who do will be in great shape! And for my betrayal, I shall be one of them! Along with that other scientist guy we're also supposed to hate! Mwahahaha!" Since it's going to be time travel, maybe instead of that being a complete surprise it could've been that their secret evil plan was to jump into Earth's better-off past and live like kings with their superior technology, and it just turns out they were wrong about the direction. Or, if it's important that the focus revolve around science as inherently villainous, then having the motivation be science itself would work - maybe they don't expect the wormhole to help anything. Maybe they looked at the same timeline Sally did, decided the colony ship couldn't be finished faster than the human race would self-destruct, but they would have just enough time to do one last grand experiment and at least find out the outcome of it before they die with everyone else. Right now all of this seems to boil down to that we should just assume science people are always up to no good. I don't think that chunk of people would be put off by adding in a more detailed explanation about how the science people are up to no good, while I'm definitely pretty put off by the lack of it.