Concrit for yelp

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I want to receive feedback by :
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3) (slightly preferred)

Here are the works I want feedback on:
Feedback on anything at this link would be amazing!

I'm currently trying to improve at writing multichapter works, so I'd especially appreciate feedback about one of the ones I've written so far, even if you're only able to read a few chapters:

• Solid as Stone, Genshin Impact, E, incomplete, M/F (32k)
• You Are Pain Pinned to Muscle, Dr. Stone, T, incomplete, M/M (6.5k)
• Cloak and Dagger, Cape and Cowl, Original, E (ish), F/F (12.6k)
• The Substitute King, Original Work, E, M/M, major character death, non-con (10.8k)
• The Devil's Cut, Eyeshield 21, T, M/M (9k)

My works' fandoms and content notes are:

• Mostly: Eyeshield 21, Genshin Impact, Original Work
• Also: Alice in Borderland, Hunter x Hunter, The Man from U.N.C.L.E., Dr. Stone, Arcane: League of Legends

All works should be appropriately tagged, but I'd be happy to provide more detailed content warnings for any.

I have these questions for readers:

• What are your first impressions of the work before reading? Do you have any feedback about title, tags, or summary?
• What impressions are you left with after reading? Were there any memorable moments? Was there a satisfying ending?
• Are there moments where the story runs out of steam for you, and struggles to keep your interest? Is there anything you would change about the structure or pacing of the story?
• Did you find anything implausible or jarring that took you out of the reading experience?

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I absolutely adore feedback, so any form or style will be cherished. Feel free to be blunt with your concrit, I would be delighted to learn where to improve. I'm also happy to hear if there are parts you enjoyed, or surprised you, or made you feel any kind of emotion - all things difficult to gauge as the author!

Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31

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[eyeballboba]

I've posted my concrit on "The Substitute King"! (logged in this time)