Concrit for egelantier
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concrit_xI want to receive feedback by : preferably comments on AO3, or on DW on my request post.
Here are the works I want feedback on: everything on![[archiveofourown.org profile]](https://p.dreamwidth.org/b164c54b26e4/-/archiveofourown.org/favicon.ico)
egelantier is fair game.
If you'd like more direction, in this round I'd particularly interested in feedback on:
and our work is never done, Psmith pslavefic, 7500 words
winterheart, origific fantasy m/m arranged marriage with a bonus dragon, 9000 words
nowhere but footfall to the path, TSOMD, Wang Zhi/Tang Fan pre-relationship with drama and whump and torture, 6500 words
the latest slew of drabbles
My works' fandoms and content notes are: a lot of different fandoms! My primary fandom is FFXV, but I write around a lot in exchanges and such. I don't write explicit porn, but I do write some pretty hard and occasionally graphic h/c, and there's an occasional fic with MCD (it's always warned for, so check the tags).
I have these questions for readers:
- are there any stylistic tics that are noticeable (not in a good way) to you, like overusing a word or a specific sentence structure?
- are there bits where, to you, i am for pathos or high drama, but end up in bathos and something unintentionally funny or melodramatic instead?
- is there enough 'showing', for your personal taste?
- if you have anything to say about how the structure of the fics comes off to you - the emotional/narrative/plot-wise rhytm and beat of it - i'd be very grateful.
- for the fics that use pastiche, mainly Psmith and Goblin Emperor: DID IT WORK THOUGH?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'm fine with pretty much everything that's constructively phrased; I'd be especially grateful if the feedbacker offered some suggestions on how they would handle something that seemed off to me.
Comments to this post will be: Visible.
Here are the works I want feedback on: everything on
If you'd like more direction, in this round I'd particularly interested in feedback on:
and our work is never done, Psmith pslavefic, 7500 words
winterheart, origific fantasy m/m arranged marriage with a bonus dragon, 9000 words
nowhere but footfall to the path, TSOMD, Wang Zhi/Tang Fan pre-relationship with drama and whump and torture, 6500 words
the latest slew of drabbles
My works' fandoms and content notes are: a lot of different fandoms! My primary fandom is FFXV, but I write around a lot in exchanges and such. I don't write explicit porn, but I do write some pretty hard and occasionally graphic h/c, and there's an occasional fic with MCD (it's always warned for, so check the tags).
I have these questions for readers:
- are there any stylistic tics that are noticeable (not in a good way) to you, like overusing a word or a specific sentence structure?
- are there bits where, to you, i am for pathos or high drama, but end up in bathos and something unintentionally funny or melodramatic instead?
- is there enough 'showing', for your personal taste?
- if you have anything to say about how the structure of the fics comes off to you - the emotional/narrative/plot-wise rhytm and beat of it - i'd be very grateful.
- for the fics that use pastiche, mainly Psmith and Goblin Emperor: DID IT WORK THOUGH?
The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I'm fine with pretty much everything that's constructively phrased; I'd be especially grateful if the feedbacker offered some suggestions on how they would handle something that seemed off to me.
Comments to this post will be: Visible.
