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[impilii]

I want to receive feedback by:
Email (impilii2019 at gmail) or by comment on DW post in this community

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
My AO3 is impilii, and the following are works I would like to receive feedback on:
As Soft as Air, OW, F/F, rated E, (noncon) 4089 words
Collateral, Iron Man, M/M, rated E, (dub/noncon) 3908 words
Vows, The Course of Honour, M/M, rated T, (discussion of violence) 2047 words
Sweet and Undefeated, Hercules, M/M and F/M, rated E (noncon) 5368 words
Take It From Me, The Little Mermaid, M/F, rated E (noncon) 3236 words


My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Original Work, Iron Man, Disney animated movies, and one for The Course of Honour that’s listed under OW by an AO3 quirk. Many of the works were written for Consent Issues and Nonconathon and contain noncon. Vows does not have noncon.


I have these questions for readers:
General questions for all:
- What do you think of the summary and tags? Is the summary too short? Does it give enough insight into the content/tone of the piece? Any suggestions for an excerpt from the fic that seems appropriate to put in the summary?
- Pacing: How is it? How is the balance of action, dialogue and description?
Are things too rushed? Is there any point where you feel bored, or would be inclined to backbutton?
- Dialogue: Does the dialogue seem natural? Are there too many actions in place of dialogue tags?
- Blocking: Particularly in E-rated fics, is the blocking easy to follow and did it make sense? Did anything feel robotic/lacking in emotional followthrough?

Specific questions:

As Soft as Air
- Do Lucie and Violetta feel solidly drawn? Does the point of view work for you?
- Does the information about Lucie’s background feel naturally dropped in, or dumped?
- How is the pacing generally? Specifically, does the end feel rushed?

Collateral
- Does the end feel complete?
- Do the characters feel grounded in physical space?
- Are there too many action descriptions in place of dialogue tags?

Vows
- Does the point of view feel consistent throughout?
- Are the descriptions of this slightly d/s au enough to have a good footing, or does it leave you with too many unanswered questions?

Sweet and Undefeated
- Does the point of view change feel awkward?
- Does it feel like there are too many different things going on?
- Does the emotional arc work?

Take It From Me
- Does the handling of Ariel’s voice work?
- How is the pacing on Eric’s creepiness?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between:
1 to 2--please don't hesitate to be direct, but I also appreciate hearing about things that worked.