Concrit for Ancslove

[ancslove]

I want to receive feedback by: Comment on either my DW post here or on AO3 comments on the specific work

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): Anything on AO3 is fair game
https://archiveofourown.org/users/ancslove/works

My works' fandoms and content notes are: On AO3 - Buffyverse, Ancient Greek Religion & Lore/The Iliad, Les Miserables, Star Wars. My works have a lot of noncon, all clearly tagged. I like to write noncon, gen, fluffy slice of life

I have these questions for readers:

• What is your overall impression?
• Does anything stand out as particularly effective or well done?
• How are the character voices?
• How do you feel about the pacing?  Is anything too meandering, or too rushed?
• Does the ending feel complete and earned?
• Anything else you feel could be improved?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: Something in the middle (3-4)

Comments

[iberiandoctor]

So I had a bit of internal debate over whether to give you my perspective on this, and I landed on the side of saying something after all. Concrit is highly subjective, and I am here offering my opinion in all respect to your critic as well as you, in case this different view might be at all useful?

So I really enjoyed your lovely RMSE story, and I 100% agreed with everything in anticyclone's thoughtful, well-reasoned comment, except for their final point on the ending. I definitely get where they were coming from, viz, that removing references to Enjolras's doubts improved the trajectory of the emotional arc, whereas including it threw them out of the fic? It's just that, for me, including it made the ending a bit less "pat". Having this interlude with Bahorel isn't going to change their fate, or Enjolras' previous ambivalence to the distractions of love; if the last para was an unambiguous paean to a hopeful future, that would have rung falsely for me (not that either you or your critic would have suggested you do this, of course). Plus your inclusion of True, he'd never imagined needing or wanting something like this added a bittersweet note that struck me as realistic and in keeping with the canon, and provided a needful counterpoint to But the world sat on the brink of change.

(Hope I haven't been out of line with this comment; please let me know if you or anticyclone would prefer that I offered it privately and I will make it poof away!)