Concrit for Athaia

[athaia]

I want to receive feedback by : comment on my DW post in this community

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): anything that's on my AO3 profile. That includes extracts of the longer works - for example, do the first chapters work as hooks, would you read on (if this was your fandom)? Of course, you can pick something from the middle, too.

I'm not interested in feedback on The Heart of All Things, as it's in a very different style from what I usually write.

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly I write Gen, and most of my works are rated T. There are some M-rated fics, but I strive to tag everything that could raise concern, and I do pretty thorough summaries.

I have these questions for readers:

I'm aware that most people don't know my main fandom, so please approach it as if it was an original work, and let me know if the plot makes sense to you, if the characters feel relatable and believable, if their motivations are clear to you, if the pacing is appropriate, etc. Basically, let me know if anything makes you go "huh?", "meh," or "yeah, right! (as if!)"

But if you want to go more granular, by all means - the most interesting feedback is on the things I'm not even aware of. And for the sake of my ego, if you enjoyed something, let me know, too!

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Please be as matter-of-factly as possible. While gushing praise is nice, I'm not sad if that's not your style, but I don't think that any of us is qualified to give 'brutal advice' and will react a bit miffed if I perceive your crit descending from a soap box.

Also, please note that my attitude towards adverbs and semicolons doesn't follow American orthodoxy ;-) and while I will note your opinion about either, I probably won't change a thing about their use (or frequency).

Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31

Concrit for yelp

[yelp]

I want to receive feedback by :
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Comment where the work is published (AO3) (slightly preferred)

Here are the works I want feedback on:
Feedback on anything at this link would be amazing!

I'm currently trying to improve at writing multichapter works, so I'd especially appreciate feedback about one of the ones I've written so far, even if you're only able to read a few chapters:

• Solid as Stone, Genshin Impact, E, incomplete, M/F (32k)
• You Are Pain Pinned to Muscle, Dr. Stone, T, incomplete, M/M (6.5k)
• Cloak and Dagger, Cape and Cowl, Original, E (ish), F/F (12.6k)
• The Substitute King, Original Work, E, M/M, major character death, non-con (10.8k)
• The Devil's Cut, Eyeshield 21, T, M/M (9k)

My works' fandoms and content notes are:

• Mostly: Eyeshield 21, Genshin Impact, Original Work
• Also: Alice in Borderland, Hunter x Hunter, The Man from U.N.C.L.E., Dr. Stone, Arcane: League of Legends

All works should be appropriately tagged, but I'd be happy to provide more detailed content warnings for any.

I have these questions for readers:

• What are your first impressions of the work before reading? Do you have any feedback about title, tags, or summary?
• What impressions are you left with after reading? Were there any memorable moments? Was there a satisfying ending?
• Are there moments where the story runs out of steam for you, and struggles to keep your interest? Is there anything you would change about the structure or pacing of the story?
• Did you find anything implausible or jarring that took you out of the reading experience?

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I absolutely adore feedback, so any form or style will be cherished. Feel free to be blunt with your concrit, I would be delighted to learn where to improve. I'm also happy to hear if there are parts you enjoyed, or surprised you, or made you feel any kind of emotion - all things difficult to gauge as the author!

Comments to this post will be: screened until July 31