Thank you very much for the concrit! You've given me a lot to chew on, especially re: character voices and whether or not it really feels like them at all. (I've only recently bounced back into the fandom after a few years away, so I'm still finding my footing again.)
I'm a little confused about one thing you said, though, if you wouldn't mind clarifying? "They're both a little too blase/experienced-sounding about the fairly advanced kinky sex" - I'm honestly not sure what this refers to, because as you pointed out, not a whole lot actually happens before Noct's knee crashes the party, and certainly nothing I would consider to be Advanced Kink?
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Date: 2022-07-12 03:57 am (UTC)I'm a little confused about one thing you said, though, if you wouldn't mind clarifying? "They're both a little too blase/experienced-sounding about the fairly advanced kinky sex" - I'm honestly not sure what this refers to, because as you pointed out, not a whole lot actually happens before Noct's knee crashes the party, and certainly nothing I would consider to be Advanced Kink?