Concrit for Enisy

[enisy]

I want to receive feedback by: Comment where the work is published (AO3), or here in this thread if you prefer.

Here are the works I want feedback on: https://archiveofourown.org/users/Enisy Anything from 2020 except these safe works: Makeover Day; Pretty Girls Keep One Foot on the Floor; Rider, Rider

I would especially appreciate feedback on any of the following:

• Blowing Smoke Rings in the Second Circle (OW, rated Explicit, noncon, 4.2K)
• Parental Supervision (South Park, 2.6K)
• Credo (Mass Effect, 1.8K)
• Everyone Speaks Standard Here (Star Trek: DS9, 1.8K)
• Time After Time (Angel the Series, rated Mature, 1K)
• Clay Doll (Star Wars, 1K)

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Available on AO3.

I have these questions for readers: What is your overall impression? What could be improved? How does the pacing seem to you?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 2-3

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Concrit for lirin

[lirin_lirilla]

I want to receive feedback by: Email (lirin.lirilla@gmail.com) or comment on this post

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything on my AO3 written 2017 or later, except for (single/double/triple/sequences of) drabbles. AO3 link with earlier works & drabbles filtered out

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Vastly assorted, mostly book fandoms, mostly gen, mostly G-rated, quite a few crossovers. The fandoms I've written in the most are: Oxford Time Travel Universe - Connie Willis, The Scarlet Pimpernel - Baroness Orczy, The Lord of the Rings - J. R. R. Tolkien, Harry Potter - J. K. Rowling, White Collar, Marvel Cinematic Universe.

I have these questions for readers: I'm very interested to hear whatever thoughts you have on the story you choose, but in case you need more to work from, here's some general questions that you can take or leave as you wish.

What did you think of my title, summary, and/or tags? Is the ending strong enough, & what could I have done to make it stronger? Does the story feel the right length, or do you think it needed to be longer or shorter (and if so, in what way—cutting/adding scenes, or different pacing)? Did I start the story at a good point, or should I have started it later (was there too much setup? should I have started in medias res and flashed back?) or should I have started it earlier (in which case what did you feel was missing?)? How's my pacing? How's my balance of dialogue vs. description? For extended dialogue passages, is the choreography of the characters' actions okay or do they need to be doing more or less? For fics in tight third (which is most of them), were there any points where you were unclear on whose POV it was? Do you think I chose the right POV to write the fic from, or you do think a different character's would have been better? If there are any OCs in the fic, what did you think of what I did with them?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: (3) something in the middle; I'd like to hear what you liked and not just what you didn't, and I'd prefer if you weren't too blunt about it, but I'm okay with you throwing a whole bunch of "here's what you need to do better" at me.

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furchte_die_schildkrote

[apiroscsizmak]

I want to receive feedback by: Email, discord PM, and commenting on this post are all fine
scary turtle#6845
supersecretsockman@gmail.com

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything on my AO3 from the past year except for Absolutely Quackers.

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly TMA. One Les Mis fic. All tagged thoroughly. All explicit, non-con. Some underage and incest.

I have these questions for readers: I am most interested in ways I can make my porn hotter. Possible questions to address that include: What strengths and weaknesses do you find in the writing? Are there parts that drag/feel rushed? Are there parts that feel empty, or like they could use more emotional or physical grounding? I notice that a lot of the fics I find hottest have a strong sense of specificity (to the canon, to the setting, and/or to the characters). Is that something I manage in my own writing? Are there certain places you think could benefit from a stronger sense of specificity? Are there trends you notice in my writing that hinder the overall story, distract you as a reader, or weaken the emotional/physical/sexual intensity of the story?

Don't feel the need to address every question, and if you have other ideas of how to approach the critique, feel free to run with those instead! I just included these in case you want something to springboard off of. The main thrust of what I am looking for more broadly is: What are the general strengths? What could I change/do better/improve on? And how can I maximize hotness?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 3-ish (anywhere between 2-4 would be fine)

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alchemise

[alchemise]

I want to receive feedback by: Commenting on this post or email (alchemise at gmail dot com).

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything from 2018-now. alchemise

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Arrow, DC's Legends of Tomorrow, Schitt's Creek, Batwoman/Titans crossover, The Defenders (TV), Dirk Gently's Holistic Detective Agency (TV), Crazy Rich Asians (2018), Black Panther (2018), various songs.
I think my tags indicate what's in my CNTW fics, but I'm happy to clarify anything if it's unclear!

I have these questions for readers:
I like to try and write different genres, so I'm curious how well I do at them. But really, anything you want to provide feedback on would be amazing.
If shipfic: does the fic sell the ship well? If there's anything sexy, is it hot?
If comedy: is it funny/amusing?
If horror: is it scary/creepy?
General: are there places where the pacing is off, things don't make sense, characters seem out of character (or don't talk like people do)?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 1 - direct

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Concrit for SegaBarrett

[misspinkman]

I want to receive feedback by:
- Comment on my DW post in this community

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...): AO3. Any, though I am particularly interested in feedback on my two new 13RW fics about Bryce ("feel like you're treading water..." and "won't you allow yourself fall...")

My works' fandoms and content notes are: First fic has allusions to non-con but nothing explicit, the second includes references to non-con that are important to the story but again, not explicit

I have these questions for readers: Are these works effective? What would you like to see more/less of? Where could I improve the focus? Do the characters ring true to life?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 3

Concrit for cordialcount

[cordialcount]

I want to receive feedback by: Comment to AO3, comment to this post, email (onetwofourandthree at hotmail), or Discord (cordial#5530) are all fine

Here are the works I want feedback on: cordialcount, 2016 or later, please

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Utena, Yuri on Ice, Loveless, Hiveswap, Hannibal, The Handmaiden
If we don't share any fandoms, I think rise intact relies the least on canon knowledge (but choose something else if you prefer!).

( Content notes )

I have these questions for readers: I appreciate both reactions to specific elements/lines and broader comments about effectiveness/impact, tone, style, characterization, recurring issues, etc.

I think I especially struggle with
- Dialogue: Did it sound like the character/like a human being? Did it advance the scene or characterization?
- Clarity: Are the physical events difficult to follow? Did the figurative language work for you? What sentences felt like a stair went missing?
- Pacing/structure: Did the fic feel like it was building up to something, and did that something happen as you expected? Were there too many tangents? Did any particular moments strike you or feel out of place?

Please don't feel you should stick to or answer all of those. Anything that occurs to you would interest me! ♥

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: Any level you're comfortable with

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