Concrit for Ember_Keelty

[ember_keelty]

I want to receive feedback by : Comment where the work is published (AO3)

Here are the works I want feedback on:
-Any of my Dragon Age fics over the minimum wordcount. There's a variety of ratings, shipping categories, and story lengths, but it's mostly about mages, particularly Anders and mage player character OCs.
-Calling on a Friend. Undertale, Friskriel, G-rated.
-Play Hero. Undertale, Undyne-centric, T-rated for violence and death. This one is over 10k, but I would very much appreciate feedback if you're up for it!

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Listed on AO3 where I have linked.

I have these questions for readers:
-What do you think of the characters? Do their actions and motivations make sense to you? Are they likeable, unlikeable, sympathetic, unsympathetic? Did your impressions of them change over the course of the story, and if so, what caused the changes? If something about them confuses you, what? If there was a specific moment that made you feel like you understood them better, what was it? For the fics that have original characters, or quasi-original characters like fleshed out Dragon Age PCs, I'd be particularly interested to hear your reactions to and thoughts and feelings about them.
-For fics that have action sequences, or really just any kind of description of the characters moving around and interacting with each other and their environment, how do those flow? Are they clear enough to follow? Can you picture what's going on? Do they make you feel anything in particular? Is there anything in them that confuses you or trips you up?
-Generally, what's the emotional impact of my stories? Did anything in them particularly move you? Did anything in them give you the sense it was supposed to make you feel something, but it left you cold? Why?
-Ultimately, though, I'm in interested in hearing anything at all that stands out to you in either a good or bad way.

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
I'm interested in hearing any impressions at all, good or bad, and you should feel free to be as direct as you like in either case.

Comments to this post will be: unscreened

Concrit for witchorvegan

[witchorvegan]

I want to receive feedback by : Comments on this post, or, if you prefer, Dreamwidth PM (witchorvegan).

Here are the works I want feedback on:
real hurt to give this real worth (Loveless, Kio/Soubi, 1725 words, rated M)
failure boy (K Project, Reisi/Saruhiko, 3432 words, rated T)
distress → flow (Hypnosis Mic, Jakurai & Doppo, 2017 words, rated T)
don't hesitate, darlin' (Hypnosis Mic, Jakurai/Hifumi/Doppo, 2648 words, rated E)
Untitled Final Fantasy XV WIP (Final Fantasy XV, Prompto/Noctis, 1870 words, rated M)

Fandoms and content notes: All fics, including that WIP, have content notes at the links. Make sure to read the tags, too, for the fics hosted on AO3.

Feedback questions: I'm especially interested in feedback on character interactions and their relationship dynamics - whether they feel "real" and compelling, or whether they fall flat. For sex/kink scenes (especially the needleplay in the Loveless fic), I'd love to know if you can picture the scene well and keep track of where everyone is within it, and if there are unfamiliar kinks, whether they're described in a way that makes sense to you. Notes on characterization and overall canon accuracy are also very welcome, if you know the canon.

For the Final Fantasy XV WIP specifically, I'd love any and all input on the injury descriptions, and whether you think it needs more information on Noct's underlying condition.

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I prefer straightforward feedback, whether it's positive or negative. Praise for specific aspects you liked is very welcome, but I have trouble picking out the actual concrit when people try to soften it with complements.

Spelling and grammar fixes aren't super useful for me, unless you notice a repeating problem that I should keep in mind for future fics - that's something I'd really appreciate you pointing out. The FFXV WIP is an exception here as I'm still writing it, though it is fairly polished (...I hope) and I definitely don't expect a full grammar edit.

Comments to this post will be: Unscreened.

Concrit for eyeballboba

[eyeballboba]

I want to receive feedback by : Comments on AO3 (anon is fine), or on this post.

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything on my AO3!

My works' fandoms and content notes are: The archive warnings + some more should be tagged per fic, and there's a range from G to E, but I would like to note that I'm not generally a fluff person. A few of my fandoms are OMORI, Pokemon, Hollow Knight, We Know the Devil, Boyfriend to Death, and Original Work.

I have these questions for readers: I cannot guarantee edits that change the story or major beats, but I would love to hear about those and whether they worked or not! And I'm always happy to get SPAG corrections or line-by-lines, as well as advice, and feedback for things I may not have considered. Right now I'm focused on incorporating feedback into new works rather than perfecting existing pieces, so I will happily receive prompts or requests if my writing inspires you to do so as well.

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Any observations or thoughts of any kind! First impressions, what stood out to you, noticed patterns intentional or not, how characters or other story elements came off as, for the twine game what choices you made, and so on. Direct and blunt is fine, asking questions or not understanding is also fine. Praise is nice, but I don't mind negativity either. You can't go wrong with the content of your feedback for me.

Comments to this post will be: Unscreened

Concrit for Hokuto

[hokuton_punch]

I want to receive feedback by:
-Email
-Discord PM
-Dreamwidth DM or comment
-AO3 comment
-Any other option that works for you

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
Any of my published works within the length requirements are fair game! I would be especially interested in feedback on the following two stories:
the wire tensing (Weiss Kreuz, gen, 6k, Schwarz [especially Nagi]-centric, other content notes on AO3)
An Educational Detour on the Road of Life (Naruto, light Gai/Kakashi, 5.5k, missionfic, other content notes on AO3)

If anyone is interested in working with longer fic, I would also particularly appreciate feedback on the following two stories:
to distract our hearts (Naruto, Kisame/Itachi, 25k, content notes on AO3)
An unpublished Saiyuki canon-divergent fic focused on Kami-sama, about 38.5k (will provide GDocs link or text file in your preferred format if anyone expresses interest)

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
All of my published fics have appropriate tags and content notes on AO3, and I am open to providing further details if requested! The unpublished Saiyuki fic contains canon-typical violence and comedic violence/bickering, as well as an incident of sexual harassment; unreliable narration; one incident of unwanted sexual advances between two main characters (no sex happens) and a generally unhealthy attitude around sex from Kami-sama; and referenced/implied traumatic/abusive childhoods (because, well, Saiyuki).

I have these questions for readers:
-Do characters feel/sound like themselves? Are there any lines/moments that feel particularly IC/OOC? For minor original characters, do they sound distinct/interesting/memorable without detracting from the main/canon characters?
-Does the pacing work? Are there any sections that feel too slow or too rushed?
-Have I overlooked any important canon details or forgotten a plot point? Does anything seem implausible/unrealistic?
-Are there any particular issues with the prose that strike you? (Bland, too much/too little detail, repetition, etc.)

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Focused on what I can build on or improve for future stories and not strictly on what could be changed in posted works (although I welcome specific advice there as well). I don't mind directness, but I would prefer to hear what I'm doing well/getting right as well as what I can improve on and specific ways to improve or exercises to keep in mind - I would rather get something like "The pacing in this section feels a little slow, could you remove some details or cut it/summarize instead?" than "The pacing here doesn't work." I'm not too worried about SPAG but am always happy to have typos, missing words, clumsy phrasing, etc. pointed out (can't catch 'em all myself!).

Comments to this post will be: Screened until July 31st