concrit_x | Apr. 13th, 2021

Apr. 13th, 2021

I want to receive feedback by : DW comment or A03 comment is fine

Here are the works I want feedback on: Honestly, anything! See what you like. They are here https://archiveofourown.org/users/SegaBarrett

My works' fandoms and content notes are: the top ones are Breaking Bad, Bates Motel, House MD, Queen, and Oz. Mostly everything is in the T range with a few explicit works. There are a few fics with warnings for Noncon and I think a few with Underage (for canonical backstory in Bates Motel, but nothing is super explicit. Spare a Little Candle is the one that gets the most into that pairing but it's largely fade-to-black).

I have these questions for readers: What should I include more of? Less of? What works? Where might I lose people?

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: Load me up on praise first so the criticism hurts less :P

Comments to this post will be: cooked and eaten. :P Unscreened?

farla

I want to receive feedback by : On Ao3, though I don't mind if you want to duplicate it over here as well. (Duplicating it here's probably easier from a mod perspective as well.) I'm fine with anon comments.

Here are the works I want feedback on:
The Lindworm, The Witcher, 6,425 words, complete.
In the Witch's Tower, The Witcher, 1,201 words, complete.
Yenna, The Witcher, 20,555 words, complete.
The Sun Shines Differently, The Witcher/Dragon Age crossover, 1,113 words, one-shot series.
Encore, Castlevania show, 71,002 words, ongoing.
With joy shall I behold the day, that calls my willing soul away, Pokemon, 939 words, complete.
Sundown and the Shedding-Skin Woman, Pokemon, 3,056 words, complete.
The Point of No Return, Pokemon, 8,060 words, complete.
Another Verse, Pokemon, 80,066 words, ongoing.
The Best It Could've Gone, She-Ra, 2,488 words, complete.

Absolutely not opposed to comments on anything else including meta and even the most ancient stuff at the back.

For the multi-chapter ones, I'm fine with a comment on a chapter rather than the whole.

My works' fandoms and content notes are:

Mild gore, character death, abuse, science and biology heavy.

I have these questions for readers:

I'm most interested hearing whatever stood out to you.

I often go in an odd direction from canon but I do really like canon as a base. If you're familiar with a fandom, I'd like to know what you thought of how I characterized people or if there's something I missed in worldbuilding. And I value things hanging together in general, so even if you're fandom blind I'd like to hear how much the world/people/plot makes sense to you.

A number of my stories involve mildly unreliable narrators - ones who aren't lying, but whose viewpoints strongly color what they think is happening. I'm curious how well that works and your impression of the characters/situation.

I find rephrasing a sentence or giving examples of another way to handle a plot element very helpful for understanding what people mean when they point out a problem they've seeing.

For Another Verse in particular, the main character is meant to be walking a line where she wants other people hurt but she's limited in her actions to what's socially acceptable. I think I've been too conservative about what she could get away with and advice on how she could be worse would be great.

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:

Blunt is fine. If you liked something, I'm happy to hear it, but if you have nothing nice to say, I'm happy to hear that too.

Comments to this post will be: Unscreened.

galadriel1010

I want to receive feedback by : Email at Galadriel1010 at gmail.com, on Discord at Galadriel1010#1516, or in comments on this post or the works on AO3.
Here are the works I want feedback on :
Any work finished from Jan 2020 onwards on my AO3. Selected highlights within the length are:
Original Work: Angry Words in Darkened Cells f/f fantasy work – 715 words
David Blaize: Sun's Warmth - David/Frank, 1695 words
Sherlock: Give or Take Mycroft/Lestrade – 3060 words
Doctor Who: How We Say It Here Thirteenth Doctor/Yaz/Christina – 4189 words
Raffles: A Different Beat Raffles/Bunny – 6527 words

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Currently write in Sherlock, Dragon Age, various bits of the Doctor Who universe, and a bit from small fandoms including Raffles, David Blaize and Rivers of London. I have only 2 explicit works, and one is Nine Lessons and Carol where the sex is one scene in nearly 50000 words.

I have these questions for readers:
- Do I manage to match the tone of the writing to the mood of the story?
- Does my dialogue sound in character if you know the fandom, or like real people if you're not familiar with them?
- Does the scene setting add to or detract from the narrative, or just sort of exist?
- For the full adventure stories (How We Say It Here and A Different Beat), does the story flow well, is the pacing alright, are they believable?
- For the more vignette pieces (Angry Words, Sun's Warmth and Give or Take), is there enough context in the story to frame it, or could I use more explanation?
- Sun's Warmth and A Different Beat are both attempts to pastiche the original writing – if you know them, do I hit that?

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:
Please be kind? Friendly? I would love to get into a deep discussion about writing styles and technique on Discord if you're up for it. I don't want all-negative feedback, but I am keen to know areas I can improve on.

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annabelleveal

I want to receive feedback by: Comments on this post (preferred) or via email to annabelleveal2417@gmail.com

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything posted on my AO3, with a preference for works from 2020/2021 (though if you find an earlier work you really want to give feedback on, feel free!)

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Recent works are for The Old Guard, Hannibal, Veep, Everything I Never Told You, and the Star Wars Sequel Trilogy. Ratings are T-E and relevant warnings and content notes are included in the tags and author notes of each work. The two stories marked CNTW don’t contain any archive warnings, but I would consider them to be major character death adjacent.

I have these questions for readers:

Were there any points of confusion or questions you had? Any moments or details that took you out of the story?
How is the pacing? Are there parts that drag? Parts that skip over too much or feel rushed?
Are character motivations clear? Do character responses seem realistic and do character arcs feel complete/satisfying? If you are familiar with the canon, are the characterizations/voices in-character?
Is the level of description appropriate? Are there places where you would like more/less description?
General flow and language use. Did you notice too much repetition of words, phrases, and/or sentence structure? Any recurrent or particularly distracting SPAG errors?
Any other comments, general impressions, or points of improvement

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: I’m open to any style of feedback, though I do prefer that there is some mention of the things that worked well in addition to areas to improve.

Comments to this post will be: Unscreened

plutonianshores

I want to receive feedback by: Dreamwidth comment on this post, Dreamwidth PM, or email (plutonianshores27@gmail.com)

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything on my AO3 page, although I'd like to highlight (Leave You All) Severed if you're interested in reading medium-length Critical Role noncon/whump

My works' fandoms and content notes are: I write mostly explicit fic and a good deal of noncon, although I have a few G-T rated fics as well. Fandoms:
Critical Role (Web Series) (12)
Les Misérables - All Media Types (8)
The Magnus Archives (Podcast) (5)
Original Work (3)
The Terror (TV 2018) (3)
The Alienist (TV) (2)
Wooden Overcoats (Podcast) (2)
The Magnificent Seven (2016) (2)
Raven Cycle - Maggie Stiefvater (2)
Six of Crows Series - Leigh Bardugo (1)
IT (Movies - Muschietti) (1)
Les Misérables - Victor Hugo (1)
The Haunting of Hill House (TV 2018) (1)
Goblin Market - Christina Rossetti (1)
1917 (Movie 2019) (1)
Guardians of the Galaxy (Movies) (1)
Dublin Murders (TV) (1)
The Queen's Thief - Megan Whalen Turner (1)

I have these questions for readers: Do the fics feel fleshed out enough, or too short? Are there any weak spots you notice? Do they end too abruptly? But really any feedback would be great

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is: blunt, but I'm flexible

Comments to this post will be: Unscreened

rozzlynn

I want to receive feedback by : Comment on this post or ao3. (Comments are public on ao3 and screened on this post, to offer options for the visibility of the feedback.)

Here are the works I want feedback on: Anything on ao3 at https://archiveofourown.org/users/Rozzlynn

My works' fandoms and content notes are: The Magnus Archives, Golden Sun, Fire Emblem, Devil Survivor, Madoka Magica, Pokemon. Some fics include heavy violence and abuse, while others are fluff, so there's a range to choose from in terms of the content.

I have these questions for readers:

How would you summarise what happened in the story? (Since this can help with judging whether the writing successfully communicates the story it's trying to tell.)

What sort of emotions does it evoke for the reader, and do the characters' emotional arcs feel satisfying to read about (whether they're sympathetic, evoke mixed feelings, or delve into horror/condemnation territory in a way that feels cathartic - or whether any of that falls flat in places).

Are there parts where the pacing and plot feel like they'd benefit from a few points being expanded upon for clarity, or condensed to be more concise?

Are there parts that brought up expectations/potential that didn't feel like it was resolved - either in an open ending that works anyway, or in an ending that feels like it would be better with more resolution, or in a way that seems like it'd be worth exploring in a follow-up piece?

The style of feedback I prefer to receive is:

Feedback on how a story reads, especially clarity, pacing, emotional arcs and themes, plotholes and sense checking. What works well, and what could use more development. SPAG issues and other quick fixes are good too.

If there are times when it's hard to categorise one's feelings about a story into 'positive' and 'negative' columns, instead of just talking about subjective emotions, then this event could be a chance to chat without worrying whether you're correctly guessing what someone else might call 'negative' in the first place.

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