Concrit for Imperial_Dragon

[imperial_dragon]

I want to receive feedback by:
-Comment on my DW post in this community
-Email imperialdragonreader at gmail.com
-Comment where the work is published (AO3)

Here are the works I want feedback on : anything on AO3 (or a WIP not yet published which I would post here, if that suits a prospective critter better)

My works' fandoms and content notes are: I write Original Works only. One set is part of a shared modern AU ancient Roman universe (2770 auc), the other is a science fantasy story with tangential references to our world but mostly wrapped up in its own universe and not abandoned despite the updates being slow (Kin and Kind). Only one story is complete by itself (Roman AU but not part of a continuing narrative): Retail https://archiveofourown.org/works/17619455. All my works are slavefic. There is some sex but not as much as I hoped, and the kink is pretty minimal. There is reference to noncon, underage and the bad things that sexual slavery implies, and the fics are well tagged.

I have these questions for readers: Your spontaneous impressions. Mainly on flow, concentration on POV detail, characterisation, emotion (and everything) concisely delivered, world building believable, not too info-dumped, and enough shown to be intriguing but not too confusing.Also dialogue, clarity of action and whether my prose is clunky. I am aware that my plots/stories are not necessarily compelling and any advice valued, but this is not my focus. Please comment on anything that occurs to you.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: Probably in between but maybe 3-2? I value directness and try to do that myself without being harsh.

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Concrit for A Friendly Irin

[a_friendly_irin]

I want to receive feedback by:
Comment where the work is published. If you want to comment anon that is fine, but please do it on Archive of Our Own where I can respond to you.

If you don't have time to read the entirety of the longer works, only reviewing a few chapters is fine.

Here are the works I want feedback on:
Flawed Crystals (Steven Universe), fangame, playtime ~8 hours
The Darkness Between Stars (Steven Universe), 80k words, complete
Unwanted (The Amazing World of Gumball), 10k words, oneshot
The Boulevard of Broken Hearts (The Amazing World of Gumball), 20k words, complete
The Cure For Nothing (The Reconstruction), 3k words, oneshot
The Gospel of Cynthia (Pokemon), 3k words, complete
any Pokemon oneshot (vary between 400 and 10k words)

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Steven Universe
The Amazing World of Gumball
Pokemon games
The Reconstruction

content notes: Mental illness, references to abuse, family drama, relationship drama and discussion of infidelity (The Boulevard of Broken Hearts), some graphic violence (but mostly isolated to a few scenes). I believe I am pretty thorough with tagging, but please tell me if there are any tags you'd like me to add.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: Direct

I have these questions for readers:

• For all fics: Were the characters in-character? Did you like their characterizations?


• Most of my Pokemon fic are explicitly commentaries on the way canon and fandom treat pokemon and how much agency can be ascribed to them. With the exception of Blood is Thicker Than Water, they are the focus of the piece and the perspectives you should consider. Please comment on what you thought of them and their behavior.


• For The Gospel of Cynthia, I would appreciate a response to my author's note on the topic of religion in Pokemon. Did the fic give you any ideas or make you reevaluate your prior assumptions?


• The Darkness Between Stars is an explicit response to and criticism of canon, with many scenes being direct parallels or retellings of canon ones. What do you think of this criticism? Do you feel it is accurate or inaccurate? What do you think of the changes I made to make my AU work?


• For Flawed Crystals, did I handle the characters' issues accurately and respectfully?


• For Flawed Crystals, how did you treat Jasper and why? Was the climax of her arc satisfying or unsatisfying?


• For Flawed Crystals, what did you think of the ending and metacommentary?


• For Flawed Crystals, how was the game balance? Did you feel any of the characters were disproportionately useful or underutilized? Do you have anything to add to the developer retrospective?


• For Flawed Crystals, did you fight the superboss and did you feel it provided an appropriate challenge?

Concrit for flowerdeluce

[flowerdeluce]

I want to receive feedback by: AO3 comment, as it will be easier for me to find in future.

Here are the works I want feedback on:

You can find my works on AO3 at flowerdeluce. Anything I've published from (and including) 2018 onwards—that is not a drabble, double or triple drabble, or drabble series/collection—is up for grabs. Out of those, I have a slight preference for feedback on the following works, but will appreciate feedback on any fic(s) you choose:

- Finishing (Touches) - Night at the Museum (4.2k)
- Fragments - Russian Doll (3.4k)
- Submergence (Reprise) - The Book of Mormon (2.9k)

Should you feel inclined to read something 10k+, I’m also interested in feedback on: Stages – Reservoir Dogs (12.5k)

My safe works: The Intricacies of Pleasure – Star Trek: The Next Generation (Movies); An unworthy substitute - Kingsman (Movies); Confidence - Independence Day (Movies); any drabbles, double and triple drabbles, or drabble series/collections.

My works' fandoms and content notes are:

( Fandoms and content notes )

I have these questions for readers:

Any feedback is appreciated; it doesn’t have to answer all or any of the below questions. I’d appreciate if you told me what worked too. While it’s great to hear where I can improve, it’s also nice to know where I’m on the right track.

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I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 2-5

Concrit for Rabscuttle

[rabscuttle]

I want to receive feedback by: Comment on this post, email (rabscuttlerabscuttle@gmail.com), or DW PM

Here are the works I want feedback on / My works' fandoms and content notes are / I have these questions for readers:

This is the work I would most like feedback on:
Watership Down coffee shop AU
Fandom: Watership Down, coffee shop AU
Rating: G
Relationships: none
Word count: ~5.5k and ongoing.
Notes: Lighthearted/crack, no additional content notes. No need to know the fandom but if you do that's great :)

- Looking for feedback on flow and pacing, dialogue, worldbuilding, character/relationship development, and entertainment value.
- Any particular impressions of the main characters? Any side characters or arcs you found memorable, either positively or negatively?


If you prefer to look at something else:
sunfall
Fandom: Final Fantasy XV
Rating: G
Relationships: Gilgamesh/Ardyn (M/M, very light and readable as gen)
Word count: 3.8K over 6 ficlets
Notes: Ficlet collection for a ship week, contains mentioned non-permanent character death. No need to know the fandom but if you do that's great :)

- Looking for line-level concrit on flow, word choice and emotional nuance (any awkward or odd phrasing? what feelings come across, and are they too melodramatic or not strong enough?)
- Which of the stories worked and which less well? Was that because of the writing style, the subject matter, or something else?

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: Preference for direct but will welcome any level you're comfortable giving!

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Concrit for Snowshus

[snowshus]

I want to receive feedback by: Comments to my DW post to this community or email: Shufics@gmail.com

Here are the works I want feedback on : https://archiveofourown.org/users/snowshus/works
(anything from the past 5 years)

My works' fandoms and content notes are: viewable on AO3

I have these questions for readers: I'm more interested in overaching question about plot structure/pacing/etc and character's overall arches. If plots move fluidly and have satisfying conclusions, if character's choices make sense and feel consistent within the story.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 1-2

Concrit for kira_katrine

[adriennefae]

I want to receive feedback by: comment on my post in this community, or message me on Discord at kira-katrine#0981.

Here are the works I want feedback on: On a Different Frequency, an endlessly upward world, things look different from here, making up for lost time, The Red Angels, the greatest mysteries come in threes, working on halloween, new normal, the ones who stayed, all for the best, she was human.

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Mostly either Star Trek: Discovery or original works. One is tagged 'The Hymn of Acxiom - Vienna Teng (Song)'--that is in practice an original work inspired by that song. All the Discovery fics listed are gen; the original works are either gen or non-sexually-explicit F/F. the ones who stayed is tagged for Major Character Death. The ones that are tagged Choose Not to Warn usually include canonical character death/talk about it.

I have these questions for readers: What is your overall impression? For the Discovery fics, if you know the fandom, do the characters seem IC? If you don't know the fandom or you're critiquing an original work, do you get a good sense of who the characters are and do they seem internally consistent? If you're reading one of the F/F stories, is the characters' relationship believable to you, do you like it, and do the characters' feelings about each other come across well? For any of the stories, are the characters' emotions conveyed well in general? Does the dialogue flow well? Do any parts not make sense? Is the prose in general written well, and is there a good balance of description vs. dialogue vs. narration vs. POV characters' thoughts? Does it start and end in places/ways that work for you? Is there anything else that you particularly liked or disliked? Feedback on summary/title/tags is also welcome.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 3-ish.

Concrit for perverse_idyll

[perverse_idyll]

I want to receive feedback by: Comment on my post here or email at perverseidyll1956@gmail.com

Here are the works I want feedback on: The Blood of Stars (approximate 10K word cut-off is in Chapter 2, the sentence "Merlin, he doesn't want to go in there.")

Impossible Without It (approximate 10K word cut-off is in Chapter 2, the sentence "Inquiries? About what?" Harry said, bewildered.)

I'll leave it up to the reader to decide how much of the proposed sections they decide to review.

ETA: If neither of those is a good fit for you, I'd be interested in concrit for Soft Touch, Warm, Elegy for a Goat, The Lost World, or In Infinite Remorse of Soul. My works on AO3

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Harry Potter fandom, Severus Snape/Harry Potter. No explicit content within the 10K excerpts themselves, although Blood of Stars gets sexually explicit further on and includes a noncon kiss between a 17-year-old and a 38-year-old. Blood of Stars is in Snape's 3rd-person POV, later Harry's 1st-person POV. Impossible Without It is Harry's 3rd-person POV. Blood of Stars is more heavily descriptive, Impossible Without It is an attempt to be more straightforward.

I have these questions for readers: Characterization and style are always important to me, so I'm happy to hear what readers think. Blood of Stars is the first time I've written a Snape POV so I suppose one question would be, how well do I pull it off? Also for Blood of Stars: is the opening too confusing? I don't outline, so I can sometimes use help with pacing. Questions of clarity or general reader investment also matter. Since both stories are still in the early stages, you won't be able to comment on the narrative arc, but any observations on the speed, continuity, and structure of what's there is welcome. Frankly, all feedback is welcome.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: I'm fine with all levels as long as the feedback is offered with respect.

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concrit for subjunctive

[subjunctive]

I want to receive feedback by:
- comments on this post (unscreened)

Here are the works I want feedback on:
https://archiveofourown.org/users/subjunctive/works
I'm only interested in feedback for works published on or after Dec 24, 2014, PLUS "A Temporary Arrangement," which is a little further back. I'm also not that interested in feedback for the strict PWPs. (Some of my fics are Explicit, but are not strictly PWPs--the PWPs are tagged. Feedback on the non-PWP explicit fics is fine.)

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
- MCU (especially Thor)
- ASOIAF/GOT (sometimes both/either, sometimes more strictly one or the other)
- Battlestar Galactica (2003)
Most of my fics are No Archive Warnings Apply. The CNTW fics are pretty thoroughly tagged, I think. I can answer any questions you have about content before you read.
Much of my eligible work is concentrated around a few ships (Jon Snow/Sansa Stark, Jon Snow/Theon Greyjoy, Jane Foster/Loki, Laura Roslin/Lee Adama) and is almost all shippy one-shots.

I have these questions for readers:
(choose any questions you feel you can answer effectively)
- Was there anything in particular you thought was well-done or effective?
- As you were reading, what didn't make sense or felt confusing?
- How clear are the characters' motivations and decisions?
- How fulfilling did you find the development of the characters' relationship (if applicable)?
- Did anything feel unnecessary?
- Conversely, was there something you wanted more of, or something you felt was missing that would help make the story feel more complete?
- How impactful/effective are the scene openings and endings?
- Do you have any specific suggestions for anything that might be more effective done differently? (Personally, I LOVE brainstorming alternative choices and imagining the story in different ways--if something comes to mind [that you think I would be interested in based on what you've read of my writing], feel free to share it!) (An example: if you thought a scene would be more impactful in a different setting for some reason.)

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 2-5

Concrit for anticyclone

[anti_cyclone]

I want to receive feedback by: -Comment on my DW post in this community

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
- Anything from 2018-now, except 4 specific works (below): AO3 filtered for 2018-now
- safe works: It's (Redundantly) a Dark Night, Watch Where You're Going, Wrong Turn, You Like Despairing

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
- Fandoms: Mostly Good Omens, plus some original works, some Ilona Andrews fantasy book series, and some The Bright Sessions podcast
- Content notes: Some are explicit but not most. Most are No Archive Warnings Apply, but some are non-con or CNTW for consent issues. I can answer more specific questions about the CNTW fics (or any fic) if desired.

I have these questions for readers:
Your general impressions would be great! Feedback on any of these questions would also be helpful, if you would like a specific jumping off point.
- General questions: Does the ending feel like it pays off? Are emotions communicated well? (Ex. does it actually feel like the characters are pining.) How is the pacing?
- Original work: How is the worldbuilding? Interesting, consistent, over- or under-communicated, etc.?
- Smut: What contributed to a smut scene being hot? Anything that felt lacking? Or, how was the description vs. dialogue ratio?
- Non-con/consent issues: What made the villain effective or could make the villain more sinister/threatening?
- Longer work: If you are interested in reading a longer work, I have two original works (Devotion, Threefold - 15K; Here and Now - 20K; both no archive warnings apply) and would appreciate feedback on how well pre-story events were woven in, what worked and what didn't with that.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 3-4

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Concrit for impilii

[impilii]

I want to receive feedback by:
Email (impilii2019 at gmail) or by comment on DW post in this community

Here are the works I want feedback on (optional: and my safe works are...):
My AO3 is impilii, and the following are works I would like to receive feedback on:
As Soft as Air, OW, F/F, rated E, (noncon) 4089 words
Collateral, Iron Man, M/M, rated E, (dub/noncon) 3908 words
Vows, The Course of Honour, M/M, rated T, (discussion of violence) 2047 words
Sweet and Undefeated, Hercules, M/M and F/M, rated E (noncon) 5368 words
Take It From Me, The Little Mermaid, M/F, rated E (noncon) 3236 words


My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Original Work, Iron Man, Disney animated movies, and one for The Course of Honour that’s listed under OW by an AO3 quirk. Many of the works were written for Consent Issues and Nonconathon and contain noncon. Vows does not have noncon.


I have these questions for readers:
General questions for all:
- What do you think of the summary and tags? Is the summary too short? Does it give enough insight into the content/tone of the piece? Any suggestions for an excerpt from the fic that seems appropriate to put in the summary?
- Pacing: How is it? How is the balance of action, dialogue and description?
Are things too rushed? Is there any point where you feel bored, or would be inclined to backbutton?
- Dialogue: Does the dialogue seem natural? Are there too many actions in place of dialogue tags?
- Blocking: Particularly in E-rated fics, is the blocking easy to follow and did it make sense? Did anything feel robotic/lacking in emotional followthrough?

Specific questions:
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I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between:
1 to 2--please don't hesitate to be direct, but I also appreciate hearing about things that worked.

Concrit for jury

[juries]

I want to receive feedback by:
-Email: juuries @ gmail
-Discord PM: jury#5277
-Comment on my DW post in this community

Here are the works I want feedback on: These original works (all rated E):
The Drowning King (incest, noncon, 8,000 words)
The Faithless God (noncon, 6,200 words)
Subjugator (incest, CNTW, 15,000 words)
jus primae noctis (incest, noncon, 12,600 words)
The Bound Man (violence, 60,000 words).

My works' fandoms and content notes are: Original works, incest, noncon, violence, E rated.

( General crit questions )

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I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between: 1-3

Concrit for radialarch

[radialarch]

I want to receive feedback by:
- email radialarch at gmx dot com
- comment on this post (not screened)

Here are the works I want feedback on:
Complete works over 2k posted to radialarch in or after 2015; please consider any co-authored works safe.

My works' fandoms and content notes are:
Mainly Captain America movies, Yuri!!! on Ice, podcast RPF, Fire Emblem: Three Houses, scattering of others.

You're most likely to see canon-typical violence, depiction of mental illness, or dubious consent as warnings. See tags/notes on individual works, and I'm also happy to provide more detailed content notes as necessary.

I have these questions for readers:
Looking generally for any strong reactions to specific lines as well as broader impressions on execution. Would welcome anything, but for specifics:
- Are emotional arcs clear?
- Is the ending satisfying?
- Are actions/dialogue in-character?
- Was there anything you wanted to see less or more of?
- Plus any stylistic or thematic notes.

I would prefer gentle (5) or direct (1) feedback, or something in between:
Maybe a solid 3? Tell me what doesn't work, what does, no need to hold my whole hand but maybe a pinkie.